Disaster in the Early Tang Dynasty
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"Your Majesty, you promised me to break off the engagement, and now you are urging me to marry Gao Yang as soon as possible. Isn't this a lie? You are the king of a country, how can you go back on your promise?" Fang Jun looked at Li Shimin and said angrily. "You bastard! When did I agree to let you break off the engagement? I just said that I could consider it, but I don't understand. Gao Yang is the apple of my eye, how can he not be worthy of you? Huh?" Li Shimin stared at Fang Jun coldly and asked, actually he still wanted to break off the engagement, what a dream! "There are many things you don't understand? Don't even think about asking me to marry Gao Yang! Unless you give me another one, you have so many girls anyway!" Fang Jun firmly disagreed. He still didn't know who Gao Yang was. He couldn't bear the title of the first cuckold in the Tang Dynasty!
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Official(2)Scraped 4d ago
The plot is good, I just have some personal suggestions
The plot is well written, but the tone of voice is too vernacular, and it feels like old farmers chatting in the countryside. The author is great, you have to learn to change the tone. For example, a military general like Cheng Yaojin has a more ruthless tone, while a tone like Li Jing needs to occasionally swear but also be civilized. This tone includes Changsun Wuji, etc. After all, these civil servants have also been on the battlefield, so it is understandable. Like an emperor, since he is an emperor immediately, the tone of voice used in any place needs to be changed, but you can't always write his tone in a non-dignified tone, as this doesn't look like an emperor. It's just like an old farmer, and women's tone of voice is also wrong. You are a new author, so my requirements are not high, but at least you should not write in the same tone as a market lady. It feels very awkward. I listen to the book through recitation. It sounds really awkward when you write it like this. I hope the author can make some changes. Thanks!
come on
Come on, come on, come on, come on, come on
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Community(0)
Official(2)Scraped 4d ago
The plot is good, I just have some personal suggestions
The plot is well written, but the tone of voice is too vernacular, and it feels like old farmers chatting in the countryside. The author is great, you have to learn to change the tone. For example, a military general like Cheng Yaojin has a more ruthless tone, while a tone like Li Jing needs to occasionally swear but also be civilized. This tone includes Changsun Wuji, etc. After all, these civil servants have also been on the battlefield, so it is understandable. Like an emperor, since he is an emperor immediately, the tone of voice used in any place needs to be changed, but you can't always write his tone in a non-dignified tone, as this doesn't look like an emperor. It's just like an old farmer, and women's tone of voice is also wrong. You are a new author, so my requirements are not high, but at least you should not write in the same tone as a market lady. It feels very awkward. I listen to the book through recitation. It sounds really awkward when you write it like this. I hope the author can make some changes. Thanks!
come on
Come on, come on, come on, come on, come on
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