Master Tian

I have only read the first chapter and will only make some comments based on the first chapter. First of all, let's make a blind guess. This should be the author's first online article with more than one million words. Judging from the first chapter alone, as a web article, you have made several fatal mistakes. First of all, you have to describe the world view in a long way. I don't deny that you still have some skills in writing, but this is precisely the least important part of the online article. This thing that can give you points in the field of traditional novels, in this book of yours, gives you a huge loss of points. This is a flaw. When you have no fans and no fame, don't introduce the world in a long way from the beginning. The second flaw is that although your writing skills are acceptable, your introduction is really a mess. The first chapter is over 5,000 words long. The first two to three thousand words are all about introducing the world, but the key introduction is still unclear. When I was halfway through the first chapter, I only had two questions in my mind: what exactly do you want to say, and what kind of world is this? This is a question, not because you aroused my curiosity. You have not explained the world clearly in two thousand words, which is enough to wear away the patience of 99% of readers for your book. The third flaw is that halfway through the first chapter, someone finally appears, a runaway girl, a zombie, a mouse, and Ji Zheng. You have spent thousands of words eloquently, but there is a more critical question behind it. Who is the protagonist? Anyway, I didn't know who the protagonist was after reading the first chapter. I blindly guessed that it was most likely that girl. But as an online novel, with a first chapter of more than 5,000 words, you need to make the reader use their brains to understand who the protagonist is. You have already lost. It can be said that when you publish the first chapter, the success of the rest of the book is already determined. In fact, most readers simply don't have the patience to read the second half of your first chapter. There are so many books by great masters that people won't read. Why waste precious patience and time on a book by a newcomer? Would you be patient enough to let an unknown newcomer talk nonsense for a few thousand words? In the first chapter, you only need to solve three questions: who is the protagonist, where does the protagonist come from (that is, the world view), and what is the protagonist going to do next. Once these three issues are resolved, we can discuss the others. If you start the first chapter with a girl, point out that she is the protagonist, being chased by a monster, and bring the world into the world during the chase, and then Ji Zheng comes to the rescue, and then stops abruptly at the climax, and puts the rest in the second chapter, the book's score cannot be so bad. As an online novel, in a place like the beginning where every inch of land is precious, you ask readers to use their brains to think about what kind of world this is, and even who the protagonist is. It can only mean that you put all your efforts into irrelevant places. There is a term in physics called work. All you do in the first chapter is useless work. After that, you will be like a cow and you will be unable to recover.

At 900,000 words, this book is undoubtedly not a good work, but I will still continue to write it.

I originally wanted to work overtime today, but ended up drinking some wine with my boss, and I drank a little too much... Sorry

Good guy, it's been 14 hours and it hasn't been updated yet. The donkeys in the production team don't dare to rest like this.

Just an illusion

I still want to write about the battle in Rain Alley like the very beginning.

I forgot to mention that I have added two collections. Two unknown friends, thank you for your collections, but I am sincerely frightened and guilty.

Come

How should I put it, this volume will have a lot of content about Chang Heng's growth, mainly to complete some things about the demon clan, and then the main plot will seem a bit confusing. By the time this volume ends, I will be able to take back almost all the previous content.

The monsters and gods are still alive, so humans dare to erase all traces? There are two tigers living in front of your house. You just fight them off temporarily and then pretend they don't exist in the future? No matter how stupid humans are, they can't be this stupid, right? It's not like they don't have the ability to break in, and how many years can you live as a Celestial Master?