The Swordsman Who Drove Down the Mountain

Well written, cheers and good luck.

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Your writing style is so fluent, and the writing is very good as well as the visuals.

Great writing. I support it decisively.

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I'm visiting Chang'an. Good books are like a rainbow of sword energy, shining brightly in all directions. I have collected them, followed them and checked in. I look forward to returning to visit "The Sacrifice of the King"

The writing is smooth! The story is gripping, I'm a fan!

1. Main line development of characters: The opening chapter points out the main characters, the protagonist and the master. Obviously the master is in the background, and subsequent plots may highlight the master's background strength. To explain that the protagonist is successful in cultivation and is forced to go down the mountain, the author uses a lot of psychological description and action description to describe the protagonist's unwillingness to go down the mountain and the protagonist's personality. This also led to the scene of going to a small town and saving people out of righteousness. But the person Naihe rescued was pretending to be a pig and eating the tiger, and he was also a master in the mansion. And because it was explained before that the protagonist was successful in cultivation, so he was defeated by the master, and then the subsequent plot happened. It can be said that the thinking is very clear, the front and rear are taken care of, and various conflicts are intertwined, making the plot more compact. 2. Article content. At the beginning of the article, the conversation between the master and the protagonist is very interesting. With a few strokes, the narrative of the story begins and attracts the reader's interest. There are too many psychological descriptions of the protagonist in the middle part, and I feel like I am always complaining, and it feels a bit complicated and repetitive. It might be better to reduce it appropriately. 3. Suggestion: The paragraph divisions should be a little clearer. The number of words in the paragraphs is too crowded, which often causes visual fatigue for readers. Furthermore, the description of some inherent things, such as the city environment, can be interspersed with the description. Do not focus too much on the description, otherwise it will easily make people feel that it is ordinary and ordinary. A little suggestion from the author. Don't take it too seriously. Finally, I wish the author great success and greater success.

I'm not good at coming up with titles, sorry.

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