Margin of Collapse

The character story is worthy of scrutiny. I am very much looking forward to the next development. I hope it is not a dead set.

Why isn't it updated?

Although there seems to be no change in the previous chapters, after re-reading, I found a lot of foreshadowing that I had not noticed before, such as Wang De'an's betrayal, Zhao Ziqing's questions and laughter, the mystery that unfolded in the prologue, etc., Until Zhao Ziqing's reappearance in Chapter 10, and the reunion with Wang De'ande, Zhao Xiao accidentally appeared in the middle of the battle, which made me laugh inexplicably (forgive me for my inexplicable expression) The point of laughter is that the scene is too strong... If Zhao Xiao said hello to Zhao Ziqing, the scene... Haha, a little experience, light spray...) Speaking of which, Wang De'an's ending surprised me. The miserable scene followed the dialogue between Zhao Xiao and Zhao Jing, and it still made me think about the dragon clan in the south of the Yangtze River... The author's writing style also has some similarities, but it seems that the writing style is a bit immature, and it is difficult to support this type of writing style. If I use levels to explain it, personally, it is like this (ahhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhh, if there is still something wrong with my feelings after re-reading it, please forgive me...): Plot design ability is SS, structure ability is good, but the character of the protagonist is not likable at the beginning, but gradually becomes stronger in the later stage , suppress first and then expand, so I give A in terms of characterization and B in the realism of the picture. Although the richness of the thought does not lie in the richness of the language, the necessary language description skills can bring impact to the picture and make it more impressive, so this is something I think we should pay attention to. Chapter 25, the first half is all about using language to advance, which is good and bad, because there is not too much sense of pictures, and what is missing is the control of language ability. After the dialogue, I wasn't very impressed, but when it came to the Quebec-Puppet Civil War, the writing was very impactful, with twists and turns, plots within plots, and then the traitors. The plot was exciting, but the emotional aspects seemed to have failed to keep up. It's not about the emotional structure of people, but it needs a higher perspective. The grasp here is pretty good, but as the thoughts improve later, you need to have your own writing style, be unique, and develop your own style! I wish your work will get better and better and your results will be hot! ! ! Thanks! ! !

Come on, come on, come on, come on together

Xiaohan, I hope you become famous as soon as possible and break through the sky

It's really good. The direction is right.

I like the description of Mu Mu's psychological actions very well.

Your writing is getting better and better

I couldn't sleep at night and came here to catch up on the article

Support the great article and it is thought-provoking!