Naruto: Another World

Okay, I just lost everything. I grabbed it this week and I still don't have 400 coins.

This is not the ninja world's understanding of illusion, but the world of martial arts practitioners. Don't be surprised if you don't like it!

I have written almost two million words, and they say that most first-step novels are bound to be a hit, and I fell for it, haha. Looking back now, first of all, the writing style is too poisonous, and the whole thing gave me the impression that it was a novel soaked in a jar of five poisons. This novel can truly be called my dream, so eunuch is absolutely impossible, but I want to stop updating it for a few months, and want to correct the previous writing problems. After all, as a reader, I saw that your article can "poison" people to death, so I gave up at that time. Therefore, I hereby take a few months off to revise the article! I hope it will be approved. When I come back, I will finish it and I will definitely finish it, because although this one is bad, it is the dream I want to complete. In addition, I will write a second novel. The writing style is much better than this one. Please support me a lot. The first novel will be waiting for me when I come back! ! !

The beginning is wonderful. I read three chapters in a row. I have collected it. I will read it slowly. I will follow and support you. I checked in. I wish you will write more smoothly and be widely praised. When you have time, I will return to collect and support you. Thank you very much. I will continue to support you! ,

I feel that the connection between this sentence and the last sentence is a bit forced. It should be that he fell to the ground, someone came and left, and the person who came found that he could be saved.

Personally, I think it should be described as a child playing hide and seek, which is a bit stiff.

This is the last day for this recommendation, and the feedback is only for this day. I hope you will continue to support me in the future. I will give back to you as soon as there is a recommendation. Once again, I deeply thank you for supporting me as a newbie. This time, let me be bold once more and ask for a monthly ticket! !

One of the names of the two children that Uchiha Jin brought to the Ghost Gate Organization was suspected of violating the rules, so I changed it, sorry.

Hello, Yimeng Tianluo is here. Can you support each other and collect?

Xueye Xunqiu came to visit with her new book "The Young Emperor of the Ming Dynasty", asking for recommendations, collections, rewards, and monthly tickets