Blue Ocean Past

I am lucky enough to be a young man in three lifetimes, but my heart is as ruthless as water!

It's rare that I skipped the first chapter to give a chapter review. The first chapter was well written and gave me an unclear and powerful feeling, but compared to the plot of the second chapter, the first chapter did not have any main plot. It is equivalent to a trailer for a movie, so I suggest that the first chapter be used as an introduction and the second chapter be used as the first chapter. Then this is the evaluation of Chapter 2 It was written very carefully, and overall, it gave me a bright feeling. The writing, ideas, transitions, etc. Are very clear, and you can see that this is a very beautiful world. But the main plot is very little. You use too many words to describe the characters' psychology, environment, actions, etc., Resulting in the overall main plot being just a few strokes and not much to watch. This way of writing is commonly known as: irrigation. Of course, this cannot be said to be a shortcoming, but it is not advisable. You may have seen too many great masters' works on water and water, so you imitate this writing style. It can be seen that you did not draw up an outline, because there is really no plot in the first few chapters. They are all like writing introduction, psychology, and dynamic versus static. Here are some suggestions: First make it clear that you are writing the main plot, and the branch plots are used to foreshadow the writing. Your novel should be about 1,500 words. It can be seen that you have relatively little writing experience, and it feels like you have finished it just after you started. So you need to be clear about how you write. In the first few chapters, you must express the main line clearly and use less side descriptions. The word count is mostly used to develop the plot. Come on

Good morning Xingyun, Wen Nian is here to read a masterpiece. In special times, take good care. Only when you are in good health can you create well. I wish you good health and all the best, and let's work hard together in early February 2020

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