Make a Staff Out of a Staff

It looks good, but it feels a little soft to the touch. Is it handmade? Did the great god himself do it?

It's childish. I personally suggest adding some more obscure words instead, which will make you look taller immediately. For example, click, click, click, click, etc., Personal suggestions

Good work has been collected, please work hard and encourage each other

First of all, the supporting characters who appear are quite interesting, but the character descriptions are not fleshed out enough (for example, the little red riding hood is an A-cup, okay, this is a joke). Secondly, the plot is too draggy, the early pace is slow, and there is a bit too much foreshadowing. Finally, the author's language organization is also a bit interesting. It doesn't seem that tiring, but there are a lot of typos. I caught several of them. That's probably it. Why did you lock the post? I can't even copy it. Brothers, give me a like. Although I don't know the figure, I got it for free. Don't give it to me.

I was just wondering if I had written it wrong again. Is it correct to say "Bye"?

You should be saving me if you go down, right?

It's still interesting, but it's still too little. Mark, let's gain some weight and then we'll see.

After Hongdou gave some opinions yesterday, I have re-adjusted the paragraphs, hoping that this will make it less laborious for book friends. As for there being too much foreshadowing and the golden finger appearing too slowly, I think that's it. After all, I have my own rhythm, and my books have always been slow to warm up. Book friends, please be patient. There are moments of excitement, climaxes, and slaps in the face, so stay tuned.

Splashing and rolling, please click to recommend and collect...

Come and read "The Fangs Peeping in the Prison City". I hope the master can return and visit me. Please collect it! ! !