Kovu Era

The writing is too messy, I don't know why it's so profound that I can't understand it.

Overall, it's good. The subject matter is a bit unconventional in a certain sense, but there are some issues that I would like to give the author some suggestions. 1. In terms of plot, I feel that the overall context is not clear enough. Although the plot starts from the exam and ends with the protagonist being chased by the villain and slipping away, if you look at it in detail, it can only be regarded as a framework. There is no plot with emotional color and ups and downs. Especially if there is no big plot hole at the beginning, it may be difficult to arouse the reader's interest. 2. In terms of foreshadowing, some things are too out of thin air. Although the author has tried his best to fill in this aspect, like the large setting at the beginning, some things do not have foreshadowing and have no certain causes and consequences, especially in the relationship between characters, such as the appearance of the protagonist's parents, the appearance of enemies, etc., Which still need to be improved. 3. In terms of characterization, there is no certain tension and no distinctive features. To be honest, after watching so much, I still can't tell what the protagonist's personality is. The most important thing is that the image of the villain lacks tension, the characters are too flat and the personality is too single. 4. In terms of description, I think the author is really lacking in this aspect. There is really no description in the whole article. Although the description is very laborious, it is still very helpful in developing the plot or characterizing the characters. 5. In terms of language format, there is also room for improvement. In many places, there are major problems with the language connection, making it difficult to read smoothly. In particular, the connection between dialogue and psychological activities needs to be improved. The above is a summary of the author's opinions. Haha, here I wish you to become a god as soon as possible! ! !

The writing is very wonderful. I have saved it. I look forward to reading it soon. Welcome to return and learn from each other. ! !

The key is persistence

Ye Hanmo brings "The God of Amnesia" to visit the ancient masterpiece "Kewu Era". Friends who like to commit suicide should come and try the poison!!!

Sign in to support, the new book "My System Can Change Operations" is now on the shelves, please be the first to order! Please be the first to order! ! Please make your first order! ! !

Sign in to support!

Good book, good book!

The author's name is the same as the protagonist's name in my book, what a fate

Now Xinghen is laying out the background, so it may be a little confusing... But please believe that Xinghen will bring a wonderful story to readers. Please support me. Thank you.