Ghoul Cultivator

It's the first time I've seen such a spicy chicken in the late stage of Jindan

The description is very messy, the main character is still a**, there are several problems, The first point is that the background of the characters and the plot are unclear. What is the situation of the protagonist and what is his current situation? The second point is that I like to write incomprehensible words, such as the sentence at the beginning about awakening to take control of the world. Without a plot, no background, and no introduction, such words will only make people feel inexplicable. The third point is that for descriptions that are not very comfortable to look at, I suggest you look at the description methods of those novels with good results, how to write character dialogue, how to write psychological activities, how to write narration introduction, how to write pictures, how to write emotions. The fourth point is that the specific realm of the characters is confusing, the introduction is unclear and the subsequent description is unclear.

This is a fake elixir. In fact, the foundation has not been established yet.

1. The writing in the early stage was a bit baffling. How many times have I traveled through time and the words I said were a foreshadowing? 2. Being tracked directly to your home, was your hometown prepared at all? It's so unexpected to be discovered after so many years since I came to this world. 3. The preparation beforehand may be to send out the formation. Although it is Wei Zhuxian Formation, after reading the description == and it said it has its own hidden effect, the result is so low. You still need to step forward to restrain the other party and die together. Haven't you beaten him to death yet? ? ? Anyway, ghouls are in good health. There are many blood-burning secret techniques in the cultivation system, similar to the Eight Gates Dunjia. You can change the solution to: Since the rules of the world are not exactly the same, the cultivation system includes the reduction of the power of formations in all aspects, or you can only use basic formations. 4. This golden elixir, Yuanying, I can directly achieve Qi training, bigu and agility. . . After reading these basics, 5. How many times have you traveled through time? Where is the combat experience accumulated? What about life experience? You might as well be traveling through time for the first time (this can also be divided into those who know the plot and those who don't know the plot. It seems that you don't know) 6. The other party has seen your face. In order to kill him or her, you will both die in an embarrassing manner. Or should you save him or her? Please add some foreshadowing, such as a purpose or an experiment. 7. I only watched TV. The main thing in the original work is physical fitness and Hertz. The upper limit is so high. Except for the protagonist, cultivation can easily defeat the world. 8. The setting of the original work. If you don't add some settings or expand it to the whole world, you will directly reach the top of the power. Invincible Xiaobaiwen? 9. And we are actually talking about the state of mind. If we hit an ordinary human being who has been trained to use nuclear weapons, they will all die together. Are we talking about the state of mind? 10. If you really want to write about the two-dimensional world of ghouls, you might as well just create a background world similar to that of ghouls, without the original plot or pig's feet, and just splash ink at will.

Are Golden Core cultivators and ghouls on the same level? After swallowing a golden elixir, I realized that my fate was not in control. Is the author who is a brainless person not aware of cultivation at all? If the protagonist is a scumbag in the early stage of Qi training, I can still understand it. You, a golden elixir boss, face a novice investigator who is not even cannon fodder (quasi-A-level what the hell), and you still end up hurting both sides. You are not trying too hard. I am afraid you are not kidding me. Grass, rubbish setting.

Have ideas and a bottom line. OK! I don't know what will happen in the future!

I feel like it's not even interesting. Why are all ghoul novels like this? There is a book called "Light Pupil" that is similar to ghoul novels, and it was so confusing that I read it.

I have learned a lot from the book, and came to visit with my contract for the classic fairy tale "Heavenly Sword Roar" to support me, get some fairy spirit, and look forward to a return visit for guidance! ! N. B.

Passing by, I would like to recommend my work "The Storm" to be officially posted on the Zongheng Chinese website to spread Chinese culture and maintain world peace. Everyone is welcome to read it. Http://book. Zongheng. Com/book/843397. Html

You're already eating people and you're talking about good and bad. It's okay to be patient. You CCG just let go of people who want to kill you. I really feel stupid. During the battle, Hezi was obviously better at using the Fei De formation, and his realm was relatively high, but he was so incompetent.