[Broken Up, Never Reunited] [Second Male Lead Takes the Lead] [Scumbag Gets His Comeuppance] [Both Leads Are Chaste]
While alive, Xu Rujin had imagined all kinds of ways she might die, such as from illness or old age, in a car accident or a fire. But she never imagined she would die suddenly...
She spent three days and three nights without sleep, all so she could finish reading the melodramatic novel Love Beneath the City in Spring.
Then a System called 10086 came knocking, asking her to save the second male lead of a youth-angst novel. To stay alive, she agreed...
Just as she maxed out the second male lead's affection for her, the male lead's first love unexpectedly returned from abroad!
"There was no part in the book where she came back!"
"Uh... Maybe the System has a bug."
The first love had memories stored in a pocket dimension. She loved the Main God, so she had orchestrated everything, causing the original owner to lose her memories and go to Earth.
Xu Rujin recovered her memories and thought of the man who had always been by her side. She also remembered that she was a quick transmigration agent, and that an accident during one of her missions had split her soul into two fragments.
The plot ideas are all fine, but the character creation is a bit stiff. The biggest problem is the writing and description (or the use of language). For example, in first-person and third-person passages, the protagonist's name and "she" appear too frequently; there is a lack of hints of environmental atmosphere, succession and transition, resulting in a rigid and straightforward plot (I don't know if this is correct). It is a detailed version of the outline. It seems okay, but it is not good for the senses; blindly describing the behavior of the characters The character, language and psychology are not empathetic, and the immersive effect has the opposite effect of the characters being pale; (In addition, this is extremely uncertain, most likely it is my illusion, the background is not well laid out, and many details are only briefly mentioned after the necessary parts are written, which feels like making up for it). The author's ideas and concepts are good, and the elements are novel and enough to cater to the public's taste. If you just need to improve your writing skills, you will have great hope of becoming famous. Of course, it's just my own subjective suggestion. I haven't read a lot, and I'm not a good writer. I'm not good at it and I don't dare to post it. It's just a suggestion, a suggestion, a suggestion!!! (Don't spray) I just have the reading sense and intuition to read all the articles on the Internet. If the author learns from it, I will be very happy. Of course, if (the author) finds it unpleasant, does not appreciate it, does not want it, does not agree with it, I will delete the comment, but only the author has the right to say this.
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