[Broken mirrors never reunite + second male lead + scumbag crematorium + double cleansing]
Xu Rujin imagined many ways of death for herself during her lifetime, such as death from illness, old age, car accidents, and fires, but she never thought of sudden death...
She chased him for three days and three nights, without sleep, just to read "Love in the City", a book with a bloody plot.
At this time, a system called 10086 came to her door and asked her to save the second male protagonist in the youth pain literature. In order to survive, she agreed...
At the same time that she was gaining popularity with the second male lead, the male protagonist Bai Yueguang returned to China unexpectedly!
"Isn't there her experience of returning to China in the book?"
"Uh... Maybe there is a bug in the system"
Bai Yueguang is a person with spatial memory. She likes the Lord God, so she created all this, causing the original owner to lose his memory and go to the earth.
Xu Rujin regained her memory and remembered the man who had always been with her in her memory. He also remembered that he was a mission worker in the fast-traveling world, and due to a mission accident, his soul fragment was accidentally split into two.
The plot ideas are all fine, but the character creation is a bit stiff. The biggest problem is the writing and description (or the use of language). For example, in first-person and third-person passages, the protagonist's name and "she" appear too frequently; there is a lack of hints of environmental atmosphere, succession and transition, resulting in a rigid and straightforward plot (I don't know if this is correct). It is a detailed version of the outline. It seems okay, but it is not good for the senses; blindly describing the behavior of the characters The character, language and psychology are not empathetic, and the immersive effect has the opposite effect of the characters being pale; (In addition, this is extremely uncertain, most likely it is my illusion, the background is not well laid out, and many details are only briefly mentioned after the necessary parts are written, which feels like making up for it).
The author's ideas and concepts are good, and the elements are novel and enough to cater to the public's taste. If you just need to improve your writing skills, you will have great hope of becoming famous. Of course, it's just my own subjective suggestion. I haven't read a lot, and I'm not a good writer. I'm not good at it and I don't dare to post it. It's just a suggestion, a suggestion, a suggestion! ! ! (Don't spray) I just have the reading sense and intuition to read all the articles on the Internet. If the author learns from it, I will be very happy. Of course, if (the author) finds it unpleasant, does not appreciate it, does not want it, does not agree with it, I will delete the comment, but only the author has the right to say this.
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The plot ideas are all fine, but the character creation is a bit stiff. The biggest problem is the writing and description (or the use of language). For example, in first-person and third-person passages, the protagonist's name and "she" appear too frequently; there is a lack of hints of environmental atmosphere, succession and transition, resulting in a rigid and straightforward plot (I don't know if this is correct). It is a detailed version of the outline. It seems okay, but it is not good for the senses; blindly describing the behavior of the characters The character, language and psychology are not empathetic, and the immersive effect has the opposite effect of the characters being pale; (In addition, this is extremely uncertain, most likely it is my illusion, the background is not well laid out, and many details are only briefly mentioned after the necessary parts are written, which feels like making up for it). The author's ideas and concepts are good, and the elements are novel and enough to cater to the public's taste. If you just need to improve your writing skills, you will have great hope of becoming famous. Of course, it's just my own subjective suggestion. I haven't read a lot, and I'm not a good writer. I'm not good at it and I don't dare to post it. It's just a suggestion, a suggestion, a suggestion! ! ! (Don't spray) I just have the reading sense and intuition to read all the articles on the Internet. If the author learns from it, I will be very happy. Of course, if (the author) finds it unpleasant, does not appreciate it, does not want it, does not agree with it, I will delete the comment, but only the author has the right to say this.
Dear friends who have read the ending, click on my avatar and welcome to the new book of ancient fantasy.
This book will be finished soon! Welcome everyone to join the new book. Another book will be updated next month.
Hurry up and update it, chapter by chapter, it's not good to read