The Road to the First Immortal in Another World

The male protagonist is a scumbag. His main business activities include teaching others to dance erotic dances, opening casinos, etc. It's so vulgar! Abandon books

It's pretty good. It's just plain and simple.

The ending was a little rushed. It has been ten thousand years since the God King came to attack the Three Realms. The protagonist was crushed with one finger, and then the protagonist turned into light and disappeared. I think it would be better to write that the protagonist invaded the God Realm and then swept away the world. After destroying the God Realm, it would be better to go to Chaos alone.

It looks good from the front, but not so good from the back.

This author didn't graduate from elementary school, right? Making money is written as "too much money"

The author is a newbie. This article is not deep enough.

It can be seen that the author's writing style is quite good, but the lack of climax makes the plot dull. After reading the full text, I felt disappointed. The protagonist's character and behavior were a bit distorted, and the ending was a bit fast, as if it ended before it started.

The first few dozen chapters are okay, but the author is not sure about the later chapters.

We promised to cultivate immortality, but ended up opening various "hot pot restaurants" and the like

By the way, before Chapter 33, the group intelligence halo was really weird. By the way, when you are thinking about the plot, can you put yourself in someone else's shoes? The protagonist shows "business wizards" and extraordinary achievements, how normal people think, and how smart people think forward. Don't treat other people as if they are mentally retarded... At this level, even 5 points is too high.