Time travel + multiple heroines + princesses + cool stories
Qin Yi, a science student who had just entered college, got lost in love and drank alcohol, and traveled back to the body of the cuckold prince's beloved wife during the Zhenguan period of the Tang Dynasty. Look down on the most beautiful princess of the Tang Dynasty? Give them a little shock of 21st century inventions!
Why is Datang's wine so weak? Never heard of burning a knife.
What? Glaze is actually more expensive than gold. Let me turn stones into gold.
What? Paper and salt are actually still in the hands of aristocratic families. Look at me coming up with a little bit of technology.
Turpan, have you ever heard of the mighty and invincible general cannon?
Stop, stop, stop, what are the poems you are reading?
A poem famous in Chang'an.
I am the most carefree Prince Consort of the Tang Dynasty!
If you see my comment, you can quit reading this book directly.
The most fatal part of this book is the betrayal on the emotional line. Gao Yang, who lived to the end and became his wife, actually turned away from the protagonist emotionally in the middle period, and went through various twists and turns to forcefully cleanse himself (note, forcibly) to get together with the protagonist. It was a complete failure in the emotional narrative. The career line is okay. The career line is just a lump. How can something be created and passed through in one go? The occurrence of events has no succession, it happens suddenly, and there is no end.
I can probably give it a score of 2.5.
No matter what you say, the update is quite positive. Keep up the good work on the writing and content. Come on.
There are too many typos. Sometimes I can't pick it up. It took me reading it several times to understand it
Lots of typos, all guesswork. The preface and postscript don't match up.
——Chapter 1 Time Travel, Chapter 4 Overnight at the Princess Mansion, Chapter 5 Crossbow, Chapter 9 Workshop, Chapter 10 Glass, Chapter 11 Perfume, Chapter 15 Yuan Tiangang, Chapter 19 Datang Newspaper Agency, Chapter 22 High Priced Salt Gone Never to Return. Don't you think the author jumped too fast?
It feels like a stone hammer. I have only seen this kind of jumping speed in system documents.
I don't know why, but it seems that I usually don't see wine, bows and crossbows, guns, gunpowder, horses and iron hoofs before I get to around 40 or 50 pictures. Nine times out of ten, they are all bad writing. He didn't have time to lay the groundwork for many things, but he just felt that if there were any, he must have them. If, as a time traveler, he didn't have swords, guns, swords, crossbows and explosives at the beginning, then he would be sorry for his status. But if you write like this, you can refer to the ratings and recommendation votes for details. At least this will not lie.
——Compared with this, I actually have some expectations that a senior official would only control his district, and he was a county magistrate. Then that senior official would go to that county every day and govern that province very well. Later, the emperor noticed Dakuan's whimsical ideas at a glance, but the senior official kept declining, remembering the protagonist's advice to himself, to keep a low profile. So many things that were done were difficult for many people to discover. Even if the emperor finally discovered it, the high officials would make peace with you. The princess ran out of the palace and came to play in that county. The protagonist didn't know she was a princess at all. How could a normal princess be so poor? She has never even eaten snacks, and her appearance is not up to par. The princess uses the makeup masks in the palace to look real. Then the princess also opens a shop in the county. In fact, it is not necessarily a shop or she goes to work as a maid for the protagonist. If it is a partner, it feels too old-fashioned. If it is a businessman, will the princess have such a mind to run away? I just provide an idea, which is more realistic.
I read the first twenty chapters and here are my opinions:
1. Interaction between characters:
It's stiff, whether it's the interaction or conversation between the protagonist and the emperor, his father, his wife or others, simply put, it feels like he just does whatever he wants, without the sense of awe between superiors and subordinates. Also, when we talk about things, we can basically finish it in three or two sentences. I don't know the other people, but it gives me the feeling that they can continue to communicate. It feels like the author forcibly interrupted. You have to know that you are writing a novel and not a narrative.
2Character description:
The article says that the male protagonist is a stick, but nothing in your description matches the feeling that he is a stick. It didn't even describe Fang Yi's feeling of loving the dandy. (You wrote it based on history. You should learn more about the four dandies in Chang'an.)
The article says that the heroine Gao Yang is an arrogant and domineering princess. In fact, what you wrote is a love brain with the feeling of an ordinary woman, and you don't feel that she is a princess at all.
Fang Xuanling, the male protagonist's father, is famous for his role as Fang Moududu, and he is also known to be afraid of his wives. There is no such description in the article.
There are also Cheng Yaojin, Li Shiming...
The aspect of character design is not just what you say it is, it also needs to be constructed through talking and doing things, etc. After all, you are based on history, and if it doesn't fit the character, there will be no sense of substitution.
3. Praising the construction of the times
In the tenth chapter, you come up with three or four kinds of items that praise the times. To be honest, when I read ancient novels, I only read cool novels where the protagonist worked as a porter in ancient times. I don't like reading these things. But, you give me the impression that the porter did it, but it was not satisfying. The main reason is that it doesn't bring out the coolness.
4 Love lines
The author often says that he wants to write about sweet love, which is what I want to read. After all, reading novels is the best way to pass the time or relieve depression. Being relaxed is the best choice, but the emotional lines written by the author are difficult to describe in one sentence.
Writing is not easy, and everyone may have different opinions. Come on. This is neither a bad review nor a positive review.
If you see my comment, you can quit reading this book directly. The most fatal part of this book is the betrayal on the emotional line. Gao Yang, who lived to the end and became his wife, actually turned away from the protagonist emotionally in the middle period, and went through various twists and turns to forcefully cleanse himself (note, forcibly) to get together with the protagonist. It was a complete failure in the emotional narrative. The career line is okay. The career line is just a lump. How can something be created and passed through in one go? The occurrence of events has no succession, it happens suddenly, and there is no end. I can probably give it a score of 2.5.
No matter what you say, the update is quite positive. Keep up the good work on the writing and content. Come on.
There are too many typos. Sometimes I can't pick it up. It took me reading it several times to understand it
Lots of typos, all guesswork. The preface and postscript don't match up.
——Chapter 1 Time Travel, Chapter 4 Overnight at the Princess Mansion, Chapter 5 Crossbow, Chapter 9 Workshop, Chapter 10 Glass, Chapter 11 Perfume, Chapter 15 Yuan Tiangang, Chapter 19 Datang Newspaper Agency, Chapter 22 High Priced Salt Gone Never to Return. Don't you think the author jumped too fast? It feels like a stone hammer. I have only seen this kind of jumping speed in system documents.
I don't know why, but it seems that I usually don't see wine, bows and crossbows, guns, gunpowder, horses and iron hoofs before I get to around 40 or 50 pictures. Nine times out of ten, they are all bad writing. He didn't have time to lay the groundwork for many things, but he just felt that if there were any, he must have them. If, as a time traveler, he didn't have swords, guns, swords, crossbows and explosives at the beginning, then he would be sorry for his status. But if you write like this, you can refer to the ratings and recommendation votes for details. At least this will not lie. ——Compared with this, I actually have some expectations that a senior official would only control his district, and he was a county magistrate. Then that senior official would go to that county every day and govern that province very well. Later, the emperor noticed Dakuan's whimsical ideas at a glance, but the senior official kept declining, remembering the protagonist's advice to himself, to keep a low profile. So many things that were done were difficult for many people to discover. Even if the emperor finally discovered it, the high officials would make peace with you. The princess ran out of the palace and came to play in that county. The protagonist didn't know she was a princess at all. How could a normal princess be so poor? She has never even eaten snacks, and her appearance is not up to par. The princess uses the makeup masks in the palace to look real. Then the princess also opens a shop in the county. In fact, it is not necessarily a shop or she goes to work as a maid for the protagonist. If it is a partner, it feels too old-fashioned. If it is a businessman, will the princess have such a mind to run away? I just provide an idea, which is more realistic.
I read the first twenty chapters and here are my opinions: 1. Interaction between characters: It's stiff, whether it's the interaction or conversation between the protagonist and the emperor, his father, his wife or others, simply put, it feels like he just does whatever he wants, without the sense of awe between superiors and subordinates. Also, when we talk about things, we can basically finish it in three or two sentences. I don't know the other people, but it gives me the feeling that they can continue to communicate. It feels like the author forcibly interrupted. You have to know that you are writing a novel and not a narrative. 2Character description: The article says that the male protagonist is a stick, but nothing in your description matches the feeling that he is a stick. It didn't even describe Fang Yi's feeling of loving the dandy. (You wrote it based on history. You should learn more about the four dandies in Chang'an.) The article says that the heroine Gao Yang is an arrogant and domineering princess. In fact, what you wrote is a love brain with the feeling of an ordinary woman, and you don't feel that she is a princess at all. Fang Xuanling, the male protagonist's father, is famous for his role as Fang Moududu, and he is also known to be afraid of his wives. There is no such description in the article. There are also Cheng Yaojin, Li Shiming... The aspect of character design is not just what you say it is, it also needs to be constructed through talking and doing things, etc. After all, you are based on history, and if it doesn't fit the character, there will be no sense of substitution. 3. Praising the construction of the times In the tenth chapter, you come up with three or four kinds of items that praise the times. To be honest, when I read ancient novels, I only read cool novels where the protagonist worked as a porter in ancient times. I don't like reading these things. But, you give me the impression that the porter did it, but it was not satisfying. The main reason is that it doesn't bring out the coolness. 4 Love lines The author often says that he wants to write about sweet love, which is what I want to read. After all, reading novels is the best way to pass the time or relieve depression. Being relaxed is the best choice, but the emotional lines written by the author are difficult to describe in one sentence. Writing is not easy, and everyone may have different opinions. Come on. This is neither a bad review nor a positive review.