Prehistoric: Traveling Back to Nezha and Leading King Wu to Defeat Zhou

I've been watching Little Nezha for so long, so come here and express your opinion. If the author doesn't like it, just ignore it (the implication: these are the words from the heart of Sister Coffee, if you don't like reading them, just leave) Let's talk about the writing style first. The writing style of Big Monster Classmate is very smooth. The development of the plot and the presentation of the setting are all logical, without any reading obstacles or delays, which is very commendable. In fact, no one can tell what the writing style is. Anyway, as long as it makes people want to continue reading after reading it, the writing style is fine. In this regard, Big Monster Tuniuer did a good job. Let's talk about the plot. It doesn't matter if the plot of The Legend of the Gods or Journey to the West is magically changed! Anyway, everyone is just reading the article to have fun, as long as they are happy. But with the current development of the gods, I am afraid that King Wu will only be able to defeat Zhou. The power system always needs to be upgraded. It is upgraded a bit quickly now. The Jade Emperor, a strict wife, is also planning to get angry and become a beauty. No matter how he explains the teachings and intercepts the teachings next, it will take a lot of thought. It's not that the current plot is not good, but that Nezha is doing everything in the world, but in fact his character is still not established: Apart from the basic desire drive of greed for money and lust, it feels like his grabbing so much wealth and magic weapons has lost its meaning. So, let's talk about character next. This Nezha is a gangster, a sophisticated egoist, a troublemaker who only wants to gain benefits and deceive others, and a naughty kid who unreasonably stirs up trouble. These are all fine, but his character lacks a kind of motivation. Why do these things? To survive? For honor? For the mission? Actually, none. Therefore, the biggest problem with the character design of this book is still one: there is no real villain. This Nezha thinks that he will be covered for any bad things he does, so he does whatever he wants. There is no one in the book who can really spank him and make it clear that he can and can kill him. A male protagonist without crisis and pressure can only be a spoiled child. Doing some bad things can make people laugh, but if you do too much, your character will be bad. This is just my personal opinion, and it may not be accurate. Sister Big Monster can listen to it selectively. I don't mean to criticize it. After all, my own writing is not very good. Finally, let's talk about rhythm. In fact, this book does not yet have a clear rhythm, because this child does not have a main mission that is constantly being carried out. It is a bit like walking along a road aimlessly, seeing where he goes, soldiers will block him, and water will cover him. In other words, the main plot has not started yet. Maybe being passively involved in certain things is a good choice, that would be better than the male protagonist taking the initiative to steal the Queen Mother's peaches. As a male protagonist, you still need to have some positive energy, even if it's not much. Hey-hey. Whatever comes to mind, Sister Coffee has a vicious tongue and likes to scold people. If Sister Big Monster doesn't like it, you can come over and scold me! Hahahaha Love you, Baozi, and wish you a great fire! Sincerely, Coffee Sister

Please read the master's masterpiece and I wish you can become a god with this book!!!

Simply read a few chapters and evaluate your feelings. I think that whether the little fairy is in the previous TVB or this Nezha, he has revealed one advantage, that is, he is good at creating contrast. For example, Nezha joked that he had eaten up all the tea leaves in the underworld. This brings a sense of humor to the writing, which is in obvious contrast with the immortal image of Taiyi. I rather like this style of writing. It's actually quite easy to surprise people by inadvertently amusing yourself during the writing process. I have seen Yi Si Jian's fairy novels before, whether it is "Beyond the Kingdom of Gods" or "I Will Bury the Gods". The fairy world he describes gives people a sense of mystery from the beginning. Then in order to explore the secrets of this world, readers follow the protagonist's footsteps and keep thinking. This forms Yi Si Jian's unique writing style. The writing style of Xiao Shenxian is different from his, but in fact it is more rare. If it is carefully crafted in the future, I think it may be closer to Yuantong. Yuantong is the kind of author who can inadvertently say "Oh my God" in a mysterious atmosphere, and can make readers laugh while reading, without losing the depth of his writing. Therefore, if we can flexibly control the way and degree of showing this kind of laughter, I think we can completely form a writing technique that is unique to Xiaoxian. This kind of writing style cannot be easily imitated by others, including myself. Maybe this is one of the opportunities for the little immortal to become a god. Of course, there are still shortcomings. The first chapter of the opening chapter showed Li Jing guarding the Qiantang River and almost persuaded me to quit. The following writing is relatively smooth, but a few places could be described more concisely. For example, the Yellow Emperor is the first of the five emperors. It can be said once, and there is no need to emphasize it twice. It would be better if I read through it carefully after I finish writing it. At least every time I finish a chapter, I always make a lot of changes when I read it through again. It's not necessarily a major change, but I occasionally read something that doesn't make sense. This is caused by the incoherence of the text caused by my own slow pace when writing, and I can't keep up with my ideas, so I feel awkward when I read it. But I believe that the little fairy can do better than me. After all, my writing skills are still not as good as the little fairy, haha.

The writing is very perfunctory, the protagonist's outlook on life is a bit skewed, and the process of defeating Zhou is very small.

After reading the title and preface and then reading the chapters, I gave up the book decisively. I didn't even have the interest to read it. A time traveler is still following the old plot, cutting flesh and bones, and dreaming of becoming a saint. It is not until the end that I write about the realm of immortals, and I still have the spring and autumn dream of explaining the teaching of the first immortal [Tilting my head and laughing] [Tilting my head and crying]

Zhu Bajie is Marshal Tianpeng, thank you

Wrong again. Only after the Qin Dynasty did the emperor call himself me. During the Shang Dynasty, he should have called himself Hu.

Here is some popular science with the author. Hairy crabs grow in freshwater lakes. There are no hairy crabs in the sea.

My native language is Speechless, so I just read a chapter. Nezha met Daji taking a bath. As soon as the seven-year-old child touched Daji, she seemed to be in heat. She was still wet and limp. . .

The protagonist traveled through time and became Nezha, but ended up being trashed. If you don't know how to write, don't write about it. The Nezha you traveled through time ended up writing the same as the original?