After Severing the Relationship, I Will Become an Immortal and Thief

It's not good-looking. The heroine has some intellectual problems. She also said that she is a white-collar worker. She doesn't deserve this title at all. Her brain is full of water.

After reading more than 200 chapters, the plot is a bit messy, especially the character setting of the heroine. The emotional scene between Su Zimo and the heroine in the early stage also came out of nowhere. You said it was OK to cut off the love. After Luo Luo gave Su Zimo memories of his past life, you wrote Su Zimo as a brainless person. Especially when facing the heroine and Luo Luo's plot, in order to highlight that he has nothing to do with the heroine, the man was written as a brainless person to protect Luo Luo. It was too abrupt. Now I can't watch anymore. It was very uncomfortable.

It looks weird

The writing is immature and the heroine is so stupid.

After reading the comments, I think they are right. The heroine Chun Chongchong, who was an ordinary white-collar worker before wearing it, will live twenty or thirty years longer than other ten-year-olds seven years after wearing it! ? No idea! Mutated wind spirit root, isn't it a very good spiritual root? . ? Very poor writing here! Also, the title of the book does not match the content! When I saw the sword purchase, I still felt that family ties were an important and inseparable part of my path to immortality! Gone

Neither the settings nor the logic work. The writing is a bit childish and the heroine has no brains. Can't stand it. Why do some people recommend it to look good? ?

I hope I can write a good book next time

Abandon the article and write the time-traveling girl in a silly and sweet way, which is not good-looking at all.

Gu Yunchu wrote it as silly and sweet

Not good-looking, the plot is not rigorous