Online Game: The Heavenly Fate Weaver

After thinking about the emotional scenes of my male and female protagonists, I think that if I was given a chance to rewrite, I could write them better.

I recorded it and posted it on the Flower Language homepage. This cover is so pretty~

I really can't handle this ending

The structure of the game is good, but the heroine is a character who, I don't want to say, is stupid and cowardly, easily deceived by others, and always makes stupid mistakes.

There is no problem with the author describing a little bit of growth. It looks very comfortable and is more specific and comfortable than many such articles. However, the heroine in the article is suspected to be a sex brain, or the author has this tendency, for example "She murmured for a moment, not knowing how to reply. In her pitiful experience with men, such situations were rare." "Ye Xiaoyao stared at his serious handsome face. She had to admit that she was touched again. No woman can resist a handsome guy talking to you like this." What kind of best friend went to pick up the heroine, but because she was dressed in a neutral and handsome style, she was jealous of passers-by (girls) and left under their cannibalistic eyes. And the inappropriate pornographic accent. The heroine herself said that she wanted to fight in the ring with a murder weapon??? May I ask?? No, it's really annoying to be so covertly misogynistic and describe disgusting people from time to time.

In the first few dozen chapters, the heroine has a good personality (she is very lively), but she becomes more and more sad later on. Others are really playing games, and only the heroine feels like she is being played by the game.

It's really good-looking. You can tell from the writing style that the author is really good.

The heroine is like a doormat. She's already like this. Why don't she just quit the union and stay there doing nothing? The emotional lines are also written in a mess.

Very novel plot content, both following the crowd and unconventional, worth watching

The story ends here. From March 2, 2022 to September 30, 2023, it was a year and seven months. I never expected that I could write so many words in my first novel. In short, first of all, I would like to thank all readers for your tolerance for me, a newbie. I have read all the comments, and accepted all the praises. As for the scolds... Emmmmm, my mental quality is not very good at the moment. I will wait until I can calm down, and then I will talk about it. I gained a lot after writing this book. I felt my own shortcomings and worked hard to improve in the next book. The next volume will be the second part of this book. Friends who have followed me here should be able to see that I still have a lot of things that I have not written. There should be three books in this series, but the protagonists in each book are different. Reading the stories alone will not affect the reading experience. In the next two months, give yourself a vacation, prepare new books, and absorb new knowledge. See you next time~