The Everlasting Journey

Collected it. Come on, the writing is great. I will become a god soon.

It hasn't been updated for several days. Maybe the author himself can't continue to edit it. After all, you can't achieve a stable serialization with an outline of only a few words and a non-existent outline. The plot has gone on for two more chapters, but with a little effort you can see that these two plots have not been polished. I wrote it wherever I thought. There are so many faults that I won't mention how the World Society and the Medical Saint appeared. After all, the author never lays out any foreshadowings when writing plots. As long as the plot requires it, a bunch of characters without foreshadowing will appear. The man in black in the first few chapters, and the name of the man named Chu, I forgot. The sudden appearance of tool men shows that the author did not intend to portray these characters in depth, but only regarded them as tools, destined to be abandoned from the beginning of their birth. After talking about the tool man, let's talk about the plot character who is not a tool but a tool. I don't understand why Ye Xingzhou is written to death. Ye Xingzhou's death has no effect. It neither advances the plot nor sublimates the character. It is just written to death. The conflict between the Tsing Yi Sect and the Chivalry Association is also too random. The heroine is like a nuclear bomb. When the problem cannot be solved, the nuclear bomb is removed and the problem is solved. It is really useful. Then there are the male and female protagonists. The portrayal of the male protagonist is too contradictory. At the beginning, he was still complaining about his father, but after the heroine revealed himself, he began to feel sorry for his father. Where did you change? It was really Schrödinger's mental state. It is unimaginable that there were only ten chapters or so between such short-term changes. There were also illnesses that existed and disappeared at that time. It was like a gold medal for immunity from death appointed by the author. I don't care. You won't die if you don't go looking for medicine. Watching the male protagonist's actions is like playing a game and accepting tasks. There is no need for logic to follow the instructions. He is completely outside the main line. As for the female protagonist, compared to the contradictions of the male protagonist, the problem of the female protagonist is that she is passive. She has no subjective initiative at all. Except that when she first appeared, it was her own idea to solve the rat demon. Her subsequent actions are completely a bonus of the male protagonist. The male protagonist The hero needed money, so the heroine went to see a doctor to earn money, which led to the avoidable third chapter being played out in an extremely stupid way. After that, the hero fell ill, and the heroine did nothing. Finding medicine was the way provided by the medical saint. She only dealt with a thief who was a member of the Tsing Yi Sect. If it wasn't a coincidence, she would not have been able to get in. The conflict between the two parties was resolved by replacing the hero and becoming a thug. Even the most important background story is because of her mother's words. I don't understand why the grievances of the previous generation are forced on the heroine. If it weren't for her mother's words, she wouldn't even need to exist. Moreover, this background story also reveals the tearing of the setting. Normally, if you think about how a monster can be humanoid from birth, the memories and reality will be the same for more than ten years. , How did the female protagonist become so powerful, and at what point was the male protagonist taken away by the master? How could the male protagonist's father, after all his cultivation, be able to fight a great demon that was over a hundred years old? The male protagonist's mother was dispensable. She was obviously the daughter of the head of the Immortal Sect. When the accident happened, there was no movement at all from the Immortal Sect. When I looked back, I saw that the group of people didn't even know that his father was dead. These are the four major One of the sect's intelligence networks, the conversation between the male protagonist and his grandfather was incredible. He neither inquired about his daughter nor asked what the male protagonist has experienced in these years. The logic is not fluent and what does the sentence "He is actually the male protagonist's great-grandfather" mean. The author personally explained his identity. Isn't the reunion of the whole grandfather and grandson not good? There is also the male protagonist's master who asked him to leave Yamamoto if he knew that he was sick. That's not right. The trump cards he brings to people are also things that can bring life to others. He is really a good master, and the master knows what the hero wants to find, but why he knows what the thing is and knows its location but doesn't just shoot a few more people to look for it. Are all the brothers on the mountain just decorations? The evil poison mentioned in the end was cured by a few broken grasses planted by a second-rate sect. It's really interesting. , And let's talk about the assassination plot. The person who issued the commission is so awesome. Why don't you kill the male protagonist's parents yourself and spend extra money? Moreover, as an assassination organization, your people are waiting to die at the base. The plot that can be considered as foreshadowing currently includes the man in black in the first picture, and the organization that killed the heroine's mother. They are all here and there. Don't just put them together and treat them as filling holes. At the same time, the character design is also extremely unreasonable. The author always emphasizes that the male protagonist is stupid on the mountain, but the male protagonist does not act like a stupid person at all. On the other hand, the female protagonist has experienced so many things and has the ability to govern the place. She should be a smart character, but she was sent to the wolf's den by the male protagonist with no independent opinion. The setting you gave yourself is inconsistent with the specific performance. How do you want readers to see these two protagonists? Of course, none of the above problems are irreversible. What really makes me feel uncomfortable is that there are serious deviations in the author's writing style. All the characters are carved out of a template. Five chapters and five or four pairs of shemales are in love, so the pattern that could have been read has been reduced to the size of a cell. I don't think a nineteen-year-old child can write a variety of different love stories, so there is a tiger monster that is obviously all about love. Reincarnated, the relationship that can be further developed is written as the feeling that the woman is a beauty control. It is clear that she was a tiger demon who chased after her before, but she didn't like it without any change. Isn't this disgusting? The latest chapter of love also has this momentum. I know you want to write about human feelings, but have you ever thought about it, is this something you are good at? You can only move yourself if you know you can't do it. And the most important thing is that what this book conveys is too negative, letting people who shouldn't die die, and breaking up CPs that shouldn't be broken up. This kind of negative energy will not give the work depth, but will only infinitely expose the author's insufficient level to write anti-routine things. Maybe these authors I mentioned have no concept, I think it is better to be more pragmatic. Everyone does not understand such well-known terms as kingly plot and tool man, so it is better to read more books to gain insights. That's it for this book. I advise the author to let it go as soon as possible. After all, it's not sweet to be forced.

Author, thank you very much, please update