The beautiful spring comes from Jinshan Mountain. The vast water flows from the same source. The trees on the bank are so beautiful. It must be windy and rainy, and dark clouds are rolling in. It drives thunder and lightning, and burns wood when it touches it. Thousands of miles of forest have become charcoal. The rain falls and the steam steams, making the fields fertile. Under Qianxun, the golden energy is born.
Five unrelated young people, with different origins, temperaments and ambitions. But they met on the same carriage, then got to know each other, and finally intertwined, and embarked on this ethereal journey of cultivating immortality together. The five people did not expect the hardships involved, but they turned around and never regretted it.
In the end, the five eagles and colorful phoenixes soared into the sky.
It's very dramatic, but it's pure nonsense. It doesn't make sense for people with different qualifications to break through at the same speed.
It's very dramatic, but it's pure nonsense. It doesn't make sense for people with different qualifications to break through at the same speed.
It's good to read, but the only drawback is that it's too short. At least it goes to Nascent Soul, and it's just the foundation building. What a pity
I really made up the word count, and I wrote back and forth about what I had written. I have repaired Xie's shoes hundreds of times. Readers are not stupid. You don't need to write so much.
After seeing the introduction of five monster protagonists, I lost interest. I can't even stand Mr. Jin's "Dragon and the Eight Parts", and the others are even more ridiculous.
Thousands of digressions and nonsense, just to make up the word count!
Why is it that the foundation is gone?
There are too many threads and it's too messy.
I have never given a negative review to a novel, but I have to give you one today. For a novel with more than 5 million words, 4️⃣1.9 Million is a low word count.
What can I say, the author wanted to write a group drama, and the writing style is good, but the subject matter is not suitable at all, and it feels like the division is not good.
First, there is a basic introduction to the background of many stories. For most readers, it is just a lot of nonsense. This may be a bit unpleasant to say, but many settings of fantasy novels are basically the same and everyone understands them. However, the author chooses to introduce it to you from beginning to end every time as an ignorant child listening to it for the first time.
For multiple character descriptions, you can separate out one main character and briefly introduce the other characters, or introduce each character at the same time, and then advance a plot, which will have a more or less indirect impact on the next character description. This gives the reader a sense of further progression of the story.
What did the author write? Describe the early experience of protagonist A in detail and write two or three chapters. Describe the early experience of protagonist B in detail and write two or three chapters. Describe the early experience of protagonist C in detail and write another two or three chapters. . . As a result, it feels like the story is stuck in the same place despite having read many chapters.
I am obviously reading a book, but I feel tired from reading several books at the same time. You are not tired when you write, but I am tired when I read.
The plot concept is quite good, and the writing is also very good, but the writing is a bit lengthy, and I basically skipped reading. I think the author wanted to write like the Jin Yong hero, but he lacked that kind of skill. If he could cut out most of the content that has nothing to do with the protagonist, it would have a good effect. If this novel can be reduced to 1/3 of the word size, it should become a quite readable novel, and it would also leave readers with more room for imagination and open-minded discussion. Just like the work of Jin Yong Hero, many people are still discussing his inner thoughts, and they look forward to the second novel to have a more exciting plot.
It's very dramatic, but it's pure nonsense. It doesn't make sense for people with different qualifications to break through at the same speed.
It's very dramatic, but it's pure nonsense. It doesn't make sense for people with different qualifications to break through at the same speed.
It's good to read, but the only drawback is that it's too short. At least it goes to Nascent Soul, and it's just the foundation building. What a pity
I really made up the word count, and I wrote back and forth about what I had written. I have repaired Xie's shoes hundreds of times. Readers are not stupid. You don't need to write so much.
After seeing the introduction of five monster protagonists, I lost interest. I can't even stand Mr. Jin's "Dragon and the Eight Parts", and the others are even more ridiculous.
Thousands of digressions and nonsense, just to make up the word count!
Why is it that the foundation is gone?
There are too many threads and it's too messy.
I have never given a negative review to a novel, but I have to give you one today. For a novel with more than 5 million words, 4️⃣1.9 Million is a low word count.
What can I say, the author wanted to write a group drama, and the writing style is good, but the subject matter is not suitable at all, and it feels like the division is not good. First, there is a basic introduction to the background of many stories. For most readers, it is just a lot of nonsense. This may be a bit unpleasant to say, but many settings of fantasy novels are basically the same and everyone understands them. However, the author chooses to introduce it to you from beginning to end every time as an ignorant child listening to it for the first time. For multiple character descriptions, you can separate out one main character and briefly introduce the other characters, or introduce each character at the same time, and then advance a plot, which will have a more or less indirect impact on the next character description. This gives the reader a sense of further progression of the story. What did the author write? Describe the early experience of protagonist A in detail and write two or three chapters. Describe the early experience of protagonist B in detail and write two or three chapters. Describe the early experience of protagonist C in detail and write another two or three chapters. . . As a result, it feels like the story is stuck in the same place despite having read many chapters. I am obviously reading a book, but I feel tired from reading several books at the same time. You are not tired when you write, but I am tired when I read.
The plot concept is quite good, and the writing is also very good, but the writing is a bit lengthy, and I basically skipped reading. I think the author wanted to write like the Jin Yong hero, but he lacked that kind of skill. If he could cut out most of the content that has nothing to do with the protagonist, it would have a good effect. If this novel can be reduced to 1/3 of the word size, it should become a quite readable novel, and it would also leave readers with more room for imagination and open-minded discussion. Just like the work of Jin Yong Hero, many people are still discussing his inner thoughts, and they look forward to the second novel to have a more exciting plot.