The Princess Is so Delicate and Unattainable

I don't know if this is your first time writing a novel, Qianqing. I feel that the pace of the story is a bit fast. How can I put it? You want to write out all the previous characters, story lines, and doubtful points so that the story can all transition to the easy-to-write scene in the middle period. However, speeding up the pace in this way creates a chaotic scene. Importantly The characters are unclear, that is, the character description is not very good. In my opinion, an excellent novel is not only about the plot of the story, but Qingqing. You should also want to bring the male and female protagonists to life, not just the male and female protagonists, but everyone in it. Just like the characters in our real life, although they are small, they all have their own The story, but not only are the male and female protagonists not well portrayed, the other characters are not very good either. Sometimes when I read it, I would wonder where this person had appeared before, and I didn't know who this person was until I turned to the front. In terms of writing, it is actually still lacking. It is indeed very smooth to read, but it lacks some artistic conception. This kind of thing is shallow and sentimental. You need to practice more, and the story is about the plot. Don't be impatient. Good stories are crafted slowly. If you want to write out everything in your mind, you often don't know how to write it later, and it won't be perfect if you write it like this in the first place. If you spend a lot of energy to portray the characters later, you will lose more than you gain.

Some people are tough on words, but in their hearts they secretly care about others.

In fact, there are a lot of suspects in this matter, and the first one to bear the brunt is the Duke of Lu. However, just after he was persuaded to break off the engagement, something like this happened. In fact, the suspicion is too great. Unless there are too many idiots in the Lu family, it is impossible for such a thing to happen. Furthermore, the Wei Shao family is too powerful. If Feng Jinye, the prince, joins forces, it will inevitably affect the interests of many people. However, no one dares to touch Feng Jinye. After all, he holds the military power. Even if he is jealous, it is not something ordinary people can do. It is definitely not easy for something like this to happen to the Wei Shao family. Of course, it is also possible that she is a princess who has a crush on Feng Jinye. After all, Feng Jinye is young and handsome, and is a god on the battlefield. Naturally, he is the most desirable object for women in the boudoir, but this possibility can almost be ruled out.

I always believe that a person who likes you to the core, even if he loses his memory and forgets everything about you, when he meets you again, he will still blush and rub his little hands, standing in front of you uneasily and say to you, "Have we met somewhere?" And this is also the beginning of a new story between you and him, so forget about the past, it's not a big deal. What's important is that even if he loses his memory, he is still the one who loves you and is still the one who is willing to stay with you.

From the beginning to now, I roughly understand what kind of story Qianqing is supposed to tell. Two people who once loved each other, due to some accidents, one lost their memory, and the other took revenge, this puzzle was created. This is the backbone of all story lines. When the puzzle is solved, that is The day when the two get back together, but things can't end like that. When the puzzle is solved, the BOSS will appear behind the scenes. And when everything gets back together, it will be a day when the two are not shy and impatient, the domineering prince and his little wife, or the quarrelsome mandarin ducks who retreat to the mountains and forests.

It's interesting. It seems that Feng Jinye's amnesia is not simple. I will make a bold assumption here. First, Feng Jinye once said that he would only marry Qian Yu and not have a concubine. Then many things happened in the middle, which made him use some means to make himself forget. Second, he was plotted by others, or there was something wrong with him. People didn't want to see Feng Jinye after what happened, so they used some invisible light to make Feng Jinye lose his memory. Third, he lost his memory because of some accident, maybe related to Qian Yu, so everyone stopped being like before for Feng Jinye, and Qian Yu became a taboo word.

Qianyu: You don't understand me at all Feng Jinye: If you tell me, I will understand. Qianyu: You should understand even if I don't tell you Feng Jinye: How can I understand if you don't tell me? Qianyu: Yes, I understand, I will disappear for a while Feng Jinye: What do you know? Qianyu: I don't understand anything (after saying that, he rushes out of the door) Feng Jinye:?

I always feel that the pace is a little too fast. If the male protagonist in other novels has to be suspicious for at least dozens of chapters, but then again, this is suitable for the young and smart Feng Jinye. If he can't find it all the time, it would actually be a bit fake. However, this way the plot direction will be a bit difficult to write. Come on, Qianqing.

In fact, I think it is wrong to show panic here. First, Qianyu herself once assassinated Feng Jinye, and returned to the palace after many years, and it can be seen from the previous events that her psychological quality should be very high, so there should be a little panic in her eyes, but it quickly passed away with a smile, no matter what. Second, although she still has feelings for him in her heart, but since she chose to come back here, then she She must have made complete plans, and she was prepared for the consequences of being discovered. Regardless of whether she had thought about the scene when Feng Jinye said these words, even if she hadn't, then in my opinion, her inner emotional fluctuations when Feng Jinye said these words should not be that big. Combined with the following, she quickly lifted the quilt. In fact, this is the most abnormal thing. Do you think about a person who is scared to death of you one second, and then says he wants to have sex with you the next second? (A bit exaggerated) Could it be that Feng Jinye is a fool for having such achievements at such a young age? Obviously it's impossible, and then I didn't realize it, but just blushed and left. Well, this can be understood as being carried away. Then you can think clearly after calming down. So I suggest you change the word Qianqing. Of course, it's just my personal understanding. If I feel it's wrong, you can correct me. After all, the author's meaning may not be what I think.

The names of the male and female protagonists are too Mary Sue, I can't watch it for even a minute.