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What can I say about the book "The Journey to the Stars"? It is a young book. The author has spent a lot of effort on setting up the world, including the Nine Heavenly Palaces, major states, mortal dynasties, and aristocratic families. This is undoubtedly a very delicate and layered world setting. The second is the division of strength. For ordinary warriors and cultivating warriors, Yuanfu is the source of stored power. Yuanfu has a number, but there seems to be no quality level. The author divides Yuanfu into many attributes, but in fact, as long as it exists in this world, there is no so-called attribute advantage and disadvantage. Take the five elements as an example, it is not necessarily worse than some space killings. This is undoubtedly a huge shortcoming. In addition to the vagueness of the level of Yuanfu, other factors that affect strength, such as the attack methods of each level, and the classification of levels based on the number of Yuanfu are actually very inappropriate. For ordinary people, one source house is the one-yuan realm. If you cultivate this source house to a certain level, you can open the second source house. The "certain degree" here is the power level in the source house. The author describes it as the XX source level of XX source house. But talking about the origin will give people a feeling of arrogance. It is more appropriate to say that it is power, or the source of XX attributes. Regarding the explanation of the level and power of Yuanfu, I have not seen the author's detailed settings. There may be some, but it is definitely not outstanding enough. I read books more carefully, but I didn't even notice it, what about others? Apart from the fact that there is no measure of strength, there is no description of the means. Fighting is all based on the so-called source of crushing and hard blows. This is undoubtedly missing a huge point of interest. Without comparison, where is the measurement? With so many words, all the fighting processes are inexplicably won. The author asked him to win, and he won. At this point, I have to mention the shortcomings of this fairy tale fantasy. The protagonist is invincible from the beginning, invincible, crushing opponents, peers, and even people of the older generation. The author's explanation is that he was born to be an emperor. I don't know if everyone agrees with it. Regarding the author's statement, I will give him two words, fart! Born to be an emperor, you write about daily life? Isn't it enough to just write about daily entertainment? What's the point of wasting time at a low level and pretending to be B with some minions (although it seems that pretending to be B can't be done well) if you have to pursue some goal? Therefore, I have always scorned this kind of invincible flow of immortals, especially this kind of invincible flow that can crush everyone. Moreover, there is no logical concept of crushing the invincible flow. After seeing this, I once suggested that the author enter the palace and commit suicide. I can't help it. Is there any point in writing it like this? An invincible boss pretending to be cool with some "ordinary people" made me feel extremely uncomfortable. So here is my first suggestion: I suggest the author not to try the invincible flow in the Xianxia plot. This kind of plot writing is not as refreshing as the web drama "Meet the Palace Master". Anyway, its setting is to be invincible and just have some fun. However, the author, who is so invincible, still forcibly created many "tragedies". There is indeed a feeling that "young people don't know the feeling of sorrow, and they forcefully talk about sorrow in order to write new words." I believe that many people will be completely dissuaded in the early stage. Writing novels, to put it bluntly, is to convey your outlook on life, values, and worldview. There is no right or wrong view of the world, but outlook on life and values ​​are extremely important. If it cannot resonate with readers, then that's it, it just doesn't suit their taste. But if it offends readers, they will probably get slapped on their face. The author is still young, and writing some mindless and refreshing articles is much better than this. The first and most important point of a novel. Character image. To put it bluntly, a novel is a story centered on characters, and then uses this kind of story to express the author's inner expectations or wishes, or to use it to metaphor the society. Regarding the author's construction of the characters, to put it bluntly, it is a complete mess. First the protagonist. Ning Zhangxing, our young man who was born to be an emperor, grew up, or "awakened" because his family was brutally massacred when he was young, and then he embarked on his invincible path. Because his clan was exterminated, after he awakened and gained strength, he slaughtered a royal palace and embarked on the path of invincibility. Xiantian Jiuyuan Mansion, nine mansions are hidden in one mansion. His cultivation speed was extremely fast, his strength increased extremely quickly, and he soon became the number one master in a state, within a span of only twenty or thirty chapters. After turning into an invincible master, he almost ridiculed many people and forced himself a lot. Even when they met for the first time, the protagonist was extremely arrogant and did not look down on the weak at all, just like the villains in other books. You may have complaints, saying, "Don't the weak deserve what they deserve?" What do you mean by complaining about someone's injustice? The weak do deserve what they deserve, but character determines success or failure. Are you just showing your strength by mocking irrelevant weaklings? To show off in front of the weak is to act like a frog in the well? Maybe this is the author's intention? Show off in front of the weak, and then go to a place with stronger average strength to show off after you are strong enough? Speaking of pretentiousness, this is indeed a necessary plot in every novel. There is a saying: If life is not pretentious, what is the meaning of life. But does showing off also lead to points? Those ordinary people who are kind-hearted and have no evil deeds, or should we say weak people, why are you pretending to be so? Are you tired? . . When it comes to pretentiousness, we have to talk about coolness. Pretending is actually a kind of coolness, but the author seems to have not mastered this aspect yet. Because the plot developed so fast, it was almost like making a light carrier. Suddenly, the pretense was over, the plot came to an end, and the next stage of the pretense journey began. The protagonist has many contradictions and self-contradictions, which I can no longer complain about. I have to say that such a protagonist really cannot make people have any expectations for what he will encounter next. In addition, there is another character, Ning Baixiu. The protagonist massacred Ning Baixiu's family. After a queen committed suicide and apologized, he took the young girl with him at the queen's request, and the two of them lived together. In Bai Xiu's heart, the protagonist is everything and occupies all of her world. As Baixiu became more and more beautiful, she soon became the goddess of most people. Well, she volunteered herself to the protagonist, but the protagonist couldn't hold it back. After that, Baixiu died because he wanted to help the protagonist for something. After the sacrifice, the author spent some space describing the memories of the protagonist and Baixiu, trying to arouse our resonance. The idea is good, but the reality is extremely cruel. The plot develops too fast, and the death of Baixiu makes me unable to resonate at all. I even feel an inexplicable smile, not pleasure, but laughter. Regarding the story of the protagonist and this Bai Xiu, in addition to killing her whole family, she took her to a mountain forest for a while, and then they joined the sect together, and then participated in some secret realm. Then, it was gone. Many years passed and the author spent dozens of chapters. It should be less than 50 chapters. Therefore, the death of Baixiu made me unable to have any feelings. When I saw the author's memorial plot and words, I smiled inexplicably. After excluding this, there is another woman. Because she is deeply in love with the protagonist, when the protagonist's tiger body is shocked, her whole heart is like a deer, dragging her whole life. She follows the protagonist and seems to have to sacrifice for the protagonist. Seeing this, I have only one feeling. Brute! A girl's family is inexplicably dependent on the protagonist. She is very gentle, but she just doesn't know why. Maybe it's to atone for her sins (she seems to have killed Baixiu), or maybe it's something else. Anyway, this is how I got together with the protagonist. Eating together seems to be half a partner anyway. The protagonist is immersed in the "pain of losing his wife" and doesn't care much about this woman. He has repeatedly tried to persuade her to quit, but he can't stand her shamelessness and enthusiasm. The author wants to tell everyone that this woman wants to follow the protagonist herself, and the protagonist has no choice. That seems to be the meaning, and the author wants to use the death of this woman to stimulate the protagonist to get back on his feet? This is a spoiler from the author. When you see this, everyone will know that someone is about to die again, and the protagonist will remember it again because of this, and then grow up. I can no longer complain about the author's routines. There is nothing wrong with this in itself, and it is reasonable. However, there is a lack of description in words, and a lack of rendering and description of the story. As a result, the growth of the protagonist that the author is about to write seems to me like a big joke. There is only one reason. This is another girl who died for the protagonist. Who is she? Anthomaniac? If such a woman with no story, no past, and no emotional basis dies, will the protagonist really grow? I don't know how many people have to die before the protagonist becomes the protagonist in other books, but I don't think anyone would be interested in waiting until then. When I read the book before one hundred chapters, no poisonous points are allowed, and one is allowed after two hundred chapters. A story that is not engraved in your heart is not worth your patience and waiting for it. So when the author used the plot as an excuse to win and not the likability of the characters to convince himself, I just smiled lightly. I have already said that the most important thing about the novel is that the author has undoubtedly discarded the most important point and ignored the essentials. The reason why any famous novel is famous is because of the characters in it. Rather than a weak story. The shortcomings of this book, in the final analysis, are only two: first, the plot develops too fast, and it is almost impossible to find interesting points while reading fast. The text rushes by and cannot catch the reader's attention. Second, there is a lack of side description. Profile description is particularly important for a novel or even a story. The author was extremely weak in the outline of the environment and color in the early stage. It was difficult to see anything with a sense of picture, and he only had an impression of the protagonist. The protagonist likes to be aloof and talk lightly. Then the protagonist is a bit cold and ruthless, and also likes to "actively" ridicule others. This has to be said to be a poisonous point. The author wants the protagonist to be a cold person, but maybe the author himself is not, which leads to the emergence of a contradictory character. The writing, the plot, the characters. Perhaps the plot is indeed what the author is good at, but the author's writing power and experience in expressing it in words are still somewhat lacking, causing this so-called best thing to become a huge fig leaf. There are many people who rush to the street, and I am one of them. But when describing my own story, at least I will feel comfortable, and the story will be very detailed and delicate. I don't think the author can enjoy the story at such a fast pace. Therefore, if the author cannot correct the problem of the plot progressing too fast, I still recommend that the author enter the palace. Or, after hastily writing an outline, you might end up finishing the book completely unfinished. If you want to write it sincerely, the characters and personalities will be enough. Everyone has different preferences, but without the outline of the plot, there is really no need to write this book. What he writes is a world centered on characters, not simply a story. In the final analysis, all my complaints are just due to the plot progressing too fast. As a result, the contradictory characters, the lack of worry about words, as well as the level of realm setting and fighting details, the description of the environment, the sense of color and picture, and even the lack of emotion are all caused by the author's plot progressing too fast. Details determine success or failure. If you want to end the story of a fairy world with just one million or even less than one million, it is recommended that the author stop writing as soon as possible to avoid futility. It is not too late to revise the text at this time. Get rid of the shortcomings as soon as possible. Modify a few things that need to be modified at the beginning. Later, slow down the pace, calm down, and slowly draw the outline. This is a business that requires meditation. How can half-heartedness accomplish anything? As for struggling with one word description, there is no need. I remember the author once said that he struggled for a long time with the two words "reverse shooting" and "reverse flying". Perhaps, the author is suitable to be a commentator, not an author! Having said this, there are many shortcomings, but there is still something to praise, at least, I haven't given up yet. Let go of your inner self-esteem, put yourself into the world you write, and look at the characters you have sketched. Their every word, deed, smile, and inner feeling under your control, are they actions they can really make? There is no need to defend myself. I have no intention of arguing with my brother. I hope that I will be careful in my writing in the future so that I can take care of myself. Come on Don't think about it Foolish brother Legend of Taliu 2020.9.10 22:12:59

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When I read the second volume for the first time, I reached Chapter 26. I was a little sleepy, so this matter was put on hold. Re-read the second volume again. As a result, I suddenly felt, oh, not bad! Catch up on the updated chapter now. ①Strong and weak will always be evil, and the world is never right. When I read this, I realized that the world has never been right. I only read it from the first volume. Emperor An Zhao executed the nine clans of the Ning Mansion, and Ning Zhangxing and his mother parted ways. Or maybe, the world has never said that Ning Zhangxing is tired of the world and afraid of the world. He came out of the forest and received his first mission. The actions of Chen Lie, his disciples, and the men in black made him once again believe that the world has never been right. Strength and weakness, back to the first volume. Ning Zhangxing was helpless and watched his mother die. This is weak. Kill Taotie, get the golden finger, and destroy the Anzhao Palace. This is strong. But he doesn't want to be strong, and he will never be weak. Choose evil. Let's end with the end of this chapter. Therefore, being strong is both good and evil, and being weak is both good and evil. The weak and the strong will eventually turn evil, and the world will never be right. ②Ning Zhangxing and mother Chapter 12: Eighteen years old, you have grown up Chapter Thirteen The Last Gift Of all the sources in the world, love must be the first. Ning Zhangxing made a choice. I heard that all kings are like this, just cut off love! Then there is another contradiction here. The Fifth Origin Palace is the realization brought about by mother's love. He has love again. It is exciting to see whether Ning Zhangxing will choose Qiang in the future. Use one of the paragraphs, this is a regret. It left him with regrets. I always think about what if One day, I also die, and when I see you, I can tell you all these scenery, so that You know, I've had a good time these years. I saw you today, but there is no chance for these Will tell it again. Even if I die, you won't be able to hear me. Mom, I'm so useless. Even if I send Anzhao to the imperial palace Thousands of people above and below were slaughtered, but no more I can't see you wearing the red dress I gave you. Me Even if this person is killed, he is sent to Yuan Mansion as a prisoner Nutrient, but I have lost you forever and ever. ③I want to complain Chapter 22 Choosing the Path Let him recognize himself and his way again. Chapter 29: Fighting to the death, not seeking glory The tragedy begins. There is a long section in the middle. After reading it, I can't explain why, so I won't talk about it anymore. Tears of White Sleeves and Duanqing are really a bit rough here. The white sleeves are gone, gone, just gone. Ning Zhangxing became the Lord of the Ning Territory, and he also unified the abandoning state. So is our Bai Xiu a tool man? He Rou made a brilliant appearance, she killed Bai Xiu, and Ning Zhangxing killed her father. "I will not take revenge for killing my father. Because I love you." Ning Zhangxing cupped his cheek and said, "Don't love me, it won't work. I have a sister, Bai Xiu." The latest update is not as exciting as before. Abandon your life, a cat has nine lives, you say you gave up your destiny. If you give it up, give it up. Don't forget to say that you are not a prisoner.