Blood disaster in the divine world,
Fire God Mo was born and reborn as a useless person named Mo Shi!
The divine power is gone, the soul pearl is dead,
In this soul sword star where there is no god and majors in soul sword!
How will he take revenge?
What does that mysterious language mean?
Can the power of the soul sword really move the sky?
Can the flames of the bathing sky reappear in the future?
How can all of this be continued?
When the giant wheel of space turns again!
When the God of Vulcan meets her, and her, she... The reincarnation of fate, the God of Vulcan comes, you all will tremble! ! !
The world of gods is supreme, Mo Shidao said, "Who dares to say that a woman cannot become a god?"
I promised you a long review before, but I'm late. I'd like to apologize first.
Dada's novel has a delicate writing style. I read fifteen chapters carefully and five chapters briefly. I really learned a lot. I would like to give Dada a thumbs up!
A big novel should be a waste novel. The characters are three-dimensional, and the interaction between the protagonist and supporting characters is real and vivid, with flesh and blood. It makes people feel that this is indeed a real world, not just a protagonist and a group of NPCs who need to clear the level all the way.
From the beginning, DaDa focused on making readers empathize with the protagonist. Through the delicate description, I seemed to see Mo Shi in this life waving goodbye to Mo Wangshi in the previous life. But the high-level description of Da Da was that I could clearly feel Mo Shi's determination to start over. I also clearly understood that he had never forgotten the person he was before and those things. . .
Putting it down is not to forget it, but to pick it up again after experiencing many hardships and finally growing up. The image of the protagonist and the characteristics of the loser flow made the arrangement clear and exciting from the beginning.
Let's talk about other characters. Each character's position, perspective, and way of dealing with problems are very reasonable. Although as a reader, it just feels very smooth and organized. But I know that it is already very difficult for the author to make the existence of supporting characters seem reasonable and vivid. This requires constantly changing perspectives and analyzing the heart of each character.
To put it simply, it is very difficult for the author to have an overview of the whole situation, lay out every line, and arrange every foreshadowing, and at the same time insert characters, narrow the width of his field of vision, let each character know what they need to know, and do their part well. Xiaobai, I am a senior Werewolf and Avalon enthusiast. I know that if you want others to sympathize and identify with you, you must constantly tell stories from the standpoint of each identity. I have done a great job in this!
The third point is the world setting. I personally like this unhurried and slow way to highlight the setting. Because this makes it easier for readers to enter the protagonist's perspective and explore and understand the world. A novel is an adventure of the soul in a story. It is not a class. You need to prepare various settings in advance, and then enter the text with the settings in mind to fill in the blanks. This is also done well by DaDa.
As the story progresses, it uses flesh-and-blood scenes to tell everyone how the levels are divided, the relationships between the characters, the conflicts between the characters, and the composition of the forces, etc., Which makes it very immersive. I hope it will continue to be maintained.
Ahem, everyone knows the routine of rising first and then suppressing. Now it's time to complain. Whether it's good or bad, it's my personal opinion. Don't be proud or angry!
In fact, the thing I want to complain about the most is not what Xiaobai thinks is bad, but what Xiaobai thinks needs to be paid more attention to, which is the characterization.
Because the protagonist's image is too three-dimensional, in the article, most of the words can only be used to describe the protagonist's thoughts, mental journey and inner interpretation.
Because if you want to keep the protagonist's image vivid and vivid, delicate and rich inner description is essential. But the protagonist's image is too full, and there will be more aspects that need to be taken care of. Otherwise, readers will sometimes be unable to turn around. I believe this is also a big consideration.
The protagonist has the wildness, confidence, and tenacity of the previous life, but also the weakness, liveliness, and confusion of this life, plus the disguised rogue and frivolity. . . If you want readers to change their emotions along with the protagonist, there must be a lot of description. The pace of the novel will inevitably slow down, and it will also affect the development of the main plot and branch plots.
This is not a shortcoming, it is just something that needs to be paid attention to when dealing with it. It is quite difficult for the readers and the protagonist to relax freely.
Secondly, in terms of writing, there are many sudden pauses or emotional changes in the plot. How should I put it? Some of them are for foreshadowing or emotional conflict, but some novices feel that they will suddenly interrupt the reader's train of thought. In fact, reversals and foreshadowing can really keep people reading fresh, but a pause and reversal when there is a lot of emotional foreshadowing will make me suddenly jump out of the book.
For example, the protagonist goes to deliver medicine to the heroine, and when he sees the heroine's blunt refusal, he feels that his efforts have been wasted. He also thinks of the water god in his previous life, and all kinds of thoughts rush into his mind to destroy the medicine. I had done a good job in this paragraph, but the next scene, which contained the protagonist's behavior and acted like an actor, immediately made me lose my mind, and I had to go back and think about the protagonist's character.
The same goes for the scene where the protagonist's father changes his face. I know that this is a trap and there will be a reversal later, but I feel that I have been deeply involved before and I can't adapt to it all at once.
Finally, I want to talk about the rhythm issue. Of course, this is also because as I said, the details and daily life are too rich, and the rhythm will naturally be slow. It can be seen that DaDa is also speeding up the main plot as much as possible, such as letting the protagonist receive a beating and six years have passed, such as the actions of the two major families, such as the heroine being injured.
But despite this, it is still a bit slow, not only in the plot, but also in the emotional line. Even though the main character wants to pretend and fool around, getting stronger and finding a way to do it is a topic that cannot be avoided. After reading twenty chapters, I found that the main character is good at everything, but the sense of urgency is too low and the pressure from the outside is not strong enough. The heroine's injury and strength, as well as the appearance of her love rival, will provide pressure, but the description from this perspective makes it easier to focus on the relationship rather than the main line. . . (Or maybe I understood it wrong and feelings are the main thread?!)
Well, since I haven't read many chapters, I'll just leave the review here. There will be updates later!
Thank you for your support. I also like your articles very much. I will follow them!
Ps: Why is your nickname Laobian? . . Are all masters so erratic?
Come on,,, I'm back to publish books.
Why hasn't my Xiaojiu updated yet? Urge for update, Urge for update, Urge for update!
The last top gold package at the end of the month
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Join the group for book lovers, the book club is in the profile.
When leaving messages for mutual subscriptions, remember to tell us whether customization is enabled or not.
Write this story seriously and give yourself an explanation!
I'm tired, I haven't earned any money, and I've made myself exhausted.
There is a gap between dreams and reality, but let's hold on!
Because I still think that my book is the ceiling of white text, the pinnacle of the harem fantasy genre, and it is also attractive. Even if there are many flaws, I am still so proud.
The stars in the sky can embrace the moon. There are no people like me in this world. This is the world, and there are thousands of you.
This post will never sink
It's both a thank you and a souvenir
I hope that perseverance will bring results, and I also look forward to the day when I can shine.
If you don't kill, you will be killed. Everything is fate, and you can't control it at all.
If possible, who would be willing to be stained with blood and right and wrong for no reason?
Pig's feet have acquired the inheritance of this world, and can definitely pick off five bad guys!
It's a pity that it's not me who will accompany you until the end
I promised you a long review before, but I'm late. I'd like to apologize first. Dada's novel has a delicate writing style. I read fifteen chapters carefully and five chapters briefly. I really learned a lot. I would like to give Dada a thumbs up! A big novel should be a waste novel. The characters are three-dimensional, and the interaction between the protagonist and supporting characters is real and vivid, with flesh and blood. It makes people feel that this is indeed a real world, not just a protagonist and a group of NPCs who need to clear the level all the way. From the beginning, DaDa focused on making readers empathize with the protagonist. Through the delicate description, I seemed to see Mo Shi in this life waving goodbye to Mo Wangshi in the previous life. But the high-level description of Da Da was that I could clearly feel Mo Shi's determination to start over. I also clearly understood that he had never forgotten the person he was before and those things. . . Putting it down is not to forget it, but to pick it up again after experiencing many hardships and finally growing up. The image of the protagonist and the characteristics of the loser flow made the arrangement clear and exciting from the beginning. Let's talk about other characters. Each character's position, perspective, and way of dealing with problems are very reasonable. Although as a reader, it just feels very smooth and organized. But I know that it is already very difficult for the author to make the existence of supporting characters seem reasonable and vivid. This requires constantly changing perspectives and analyzing the heart of each character. To put it simply, it is very difficult for the author to have an overview of the whole situation, lay out every line, and arrange every foreshadowing, and at the same time insert characters, narrow the width of his field of vision, let each character know what they need to know, and do their part well. Xiaobai, I am a senior Werewolf and Avalon enthusiast. I know that if you want others to sympathize and identify with you, you must constantly tell stories from the standpoint of each identity. I have done a great job in this! The third point is the world setting. I personally like this unhurried and slow way to highlight the setting. Because this makes it easier for readers to enter the protagonist's perspective and explore and understand the world. A novel is an adventure of the soul in a story. It is not a class. You need to prepare various settings in advance, and then enter the text with the settings in mind to fill in the blanks. This is also done well by DaDa. As the story progresses, it uses flesh-and-blood scenes to tell everyone how the levels are divided, the relationships between the characters, the conflicts between the characters, and the composition of the forces, etc., Which makes it very immersive. I hope it will continue to be maintained. Ahem, everyone knows the routine of rising first and then suppressing. Now it's time to complain. Whether it's good or bad, it's my personal opinion. Don't be proud or angry! In fact, the thing I want to complain about the most is not what Xiaobai thinks is bad, but what Xiaobai thinks needs to be paid more attention to, which is the characterization. Because the protagonist's image is too three-dimensional, in the article, most of the words can only be used to describe the protagonist's thoughts, mental journey and inner interpretation. Because if you want to keep the protagonist's image vivid and vivid, delicate and rich inner description is essential. But the protagonist's image is too full, and there will be more aspects that need to be taken care of. Otherwise, readers will sometimes be unable to turn around. I believe this is also a big consideration. The protagonist has the wildness, confidence, and tenacity of the previous life, but also the weakness, liveliness, and confusion of this life, plus the disguised rogue and frivolity. . . If you want readers to change their emotions along with the protagonist, there must be a lot of description. The pace of the novel will inevitably slow down, and it will also affect the development of the main plot and branch plots. This is not a shortcoming, it is just something that needs to be paid attention to when dealing with it. It is quite difficult for the readers and the protagonist to relax freely. Secondly, in terms of writing, there are many sudden pauses or emotional changes in the plot. How should I put it? Some of them are for foreshadowing or emotional conflict, but some novices feel that they will suddenly interrupt the reader's train of thought. In fact, reversals and foreshadowing can really keep people reading fresh, but a pause and reversal when there is a lot of emotional foreshadowing will make me suddenly jump out of the book. For example, the protagonist goes to deliver medicine to the heroine, and when he sees the heroine's blunt refusal, he feels that his efforts have been wasted. He also thinks of the water god in his previous life, and all kinds of thoughts rush into his mind to destroy the medicine. I had done a good job in this paragraph, but the next scene, which contained the protagonist's behavior and acted like an actor, immediately made me lose my mind, and I had to go back and think about the protagonist's character. The same goes for the scene where the protagonist's father changes his face. I know that this is a trap and there will be a reversal later, but I feel that I have been deeply involved before and I can't adapt to it all at once. Finally, I want to talk about the rhythm issue. Of course, this is also because as I said, the details and daily life are too rich, and the rhythm will naturally be slow. It can be seen that DaDa is also speeding up the main plot as much as possible, such as letting the protagonist receive a beating and six years have passed, such as the actions of the two major families, such as the heroine being injured. But despite this, it is still a bit slow, not only in the plot, but also in the emotional line. Even though the main character wants to pretend and fool around, getting stronger and finding a way to do it is a topic that cannot be avoided. After reading twenty chapters, I found that the main character is good at everything, but the sense of urgency is too low and the pressure from the outside is not strong enough. The heroine's injury and strength, as well as the appearance of her love rival, will provide pressure, but the description from this perspective makes it easier to focus on the relationship rather than the main line. . . (Or maybe I understood it wrong and feelings are the main thread?!) Well, since I haven't read many chapters, I'll just leave the review here. There will be updates later! Thank you for your support. I also like your articles very much. I will follow them! Ps: Why is your nickname Laobian? . . Are all masters so erratic?
Come on,,, I'm back to publish books.
Why hasn't my Xiaojiu updated yet? Urge for update, Urge for update, Urge for update!
The last top gold package at the end of the month
No packages will be issued from now on. Join the group for book lovers, the book club is in the profile. When leaving messages for mutual subscriptions, remember to tell us whether customization is enabled or not. Write this story seriously and give yourself an explanation! I'm tired, I haven't earned any money, and I've made myself exhausted. There is a gap between dreams and reality, but let's hold on! Because I still think that my book is the ceiling of white text, the pinnacle of the harem fantasy genre, and it is also attractive. Even if there are many flaws, I am still so proud. The stars in the sky can embrace the moon. There are no people like me in this world. This is the world, and there are thousands of you. This post will never sink It's both a thank you and a souvenir I hope that perseverance will bring results, and I also look forward to the day when I can shine.
If you don't kill, you will be killed. Everything is fate, and you can't control it at all.
If possible, who would be willing to be stained with blood and right and wrong for no reason?
Pig's feet have acquired the inheritance of this world, and can definitely pick off five bad guys!
It's a pity that it's not me who will accompany you until the end
To sum it up in one word "pretend hard"
Wan'er, you've done enough