The Black-Bellied and Cute Baby, the Peerless Dan Fei

Woman, you successfully caught my attention! I have read Chapter 20 so far. Let me share my opinion (only my personal opinion). At the beginning, Wang Zhao was investigating the case, which caused thousands of waves. The villain was directly relieved of his right and left arms, and the male and female protagonists still have online IQs. The heroine works vigorously and resolutely, but she is kind but not holy. The people she saves are all victims. Currently, a disciple's waistcoat has been revealed. After enduring humiliation and planning for three years, he lowered his dimension and struck a blow in a position that attracted much attention, and punished his mother and sister who had harmed him. The emperor had to show courtesy. Let me talk about the shortcomings that I personally think are lacking. It may not be accurate. Ning Ning, please refer to it🌚👍 The introduction seems to be a bit poorly written. Most of it tells the opening story, which deviates from the setting of the introduction. You can take a look at the introductions of the big names on the list. The opening chapter does not have enough conflict. It only tells the protagonist to reflect on the past. It would be better to directly describe the scene where the heroine is bullied and thrown out of the mansion and cast aside, which will increase the hatred value. The descriptions in some places are too simple, for example: the heavy rain hit Chen Shiyun unceremoniously on the face, and her small figure was not obvious in the rainy night. (Taken from Chapter 1) Modify it like this? : The heavy rain hit her hard like countless stones, and the splashing water mist blurred her figure, making her look unreal in the rain. Maybe I'm not good at writing myself. After all, I'm not a big shot, so I'll just refer to it🌚There's actually a lot of room for improvement in the first few chapters. There were a lot of characters in the early stages, including people from the Chen family, people from the Ling Palace, the two villains, and then people from the Dali Temple. Emperor, it felt a bit confusing. This kind of multi-perspective is actually quite difficult to write, but I got used to it after writing more, and I feel that the plot is still a bit under control. The priorities are a bit unclear. These supporting characters are all driving the main plot. The protagonists appear for a very short time, and then appear more and more later. Let's talk about some unsightly aspects. For example, in some places, there will be a list of character names at the beginning of the paragraph. For example, there is a long paragraph in Chapter 5, which may affect the sense of immersion. And have your colons been eaten? After reading dozens of chapters, I can't find a few colons. You don't need to use emoticons, you don't need to use yy like #*%¥&, but you still need to figure out the punctuation marks. One more thing I have to complain about is that every child picked up by the heroine has a name, but the hero is just called the Regent after dozens of chapters 😂 Where is the hero's face? There are also Emperor and King Chuang. This name is destined to be welded on. The above only represents my personal views. I just put forward my own opinions. There is still room for improvement. Let's encourage each other💕

I like to read this kind of time-travel novel with few chapters and exciting stories. The story revolves around the heroine's series of revenge after time-travel, her love and hatred with the regent, and finally the revenge of the union ten thousand years ago. They are all very exciting. The story is not procrastinating and the plot is compact. It is worth recommending.

The writing style is really delicate, the events are realistic (not outrageous), the content is relaxed and moderate, and there is no distortion of the three views! It's a rare novel. It took me a long time to find one I like, so I recommend it to you. I hope you can find something that makes you feel enlightened. Leave it to the author: I wrote the ending too quickly www. I was still immersed in the magnificent battle and before I came out, I had already begun to summarize, who is it! Can't you write more? !

This book is really good, well organized

I read the whole book. The first half of the plot is a bit draggy, and in the second half, the plot after leaving Liang Kingdom is written in one stroke, as if there is a wolf chasing behind it. It would be okay if the second half of the plot can be consistent with the previous Liang Kingdom. It feels like I first ate a noodle that I couldn't chew, kept eating it, and then poured the remaining noodles down my throat. So angry…

I feel that overall, the author has arranged the character's scenes very well and is humorous. It once made my stomach hurt from laughing. Especially at night, my bed shook because of my laughter. The male protagonist is the only one I have watched where the male protagonist is a bit awkward or even funny. He is even more kind to the female protagonist. He can do everything, cook well, clean up the house, and love others. I like it, and Moreover, the author does not follow common sense. When you guess the ending, there will be a big twist. Moreover, the heroine in this book is domineering and decisive in doing things. She is decisive in taking revenge. She is also good at alchemy. She is not the Virgin White Lotus. I like it. She does not rely on the male protagonist. She directly becomes the empress on her own. And the little dumplings she gave birth to are also very cute. Friends in the book world can check it out.

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The plot is very confusing, and the speech is a bit incoherent, making it feel mysterious. The characters have no characteristics. No matter the male protagonist, female protagonist or supporting role, no one is impressive. It tasted like chewed meat, I couldn't stand it anymore, so I gave it up.

It's great. Why does it feel like it's a novel written by people from the Northeast? The sentences are fluent and funny.

Looks good! It's just that the ending was a bit too fast. It would have been perfect if they had given birth to a little cotton-padded jacket...