Mrs. Jin Ning

The narration needs to be improved. There are too many unimportant things. It can be more concise and detailed. The theme and plot are fine. The writing style and narration do need to be improved.

What I wanted to watch was love and an interlocking plot. The heroine was a bit indecisive and had no opinion. She insisted on taking off her clothes until the end to have a child. She just wanted to see when they were going to have a child. Unexpectedly, it jumped to the end in one jump. It was too much like a virgin. No one likes to live in such a depressed way. I feel like the author is writing a family drama, and it has nothing to do with the love affair between the only couple of male and female protagonists! Come on (ง •̀_•́)ง I wish you better works, and you don't have to force yourself to write romance.

After reading more than 30 chapters, I really can't stand it anymore. The journal also records more than 30 chapters. The characterization basically fails. The heroine wants to imitate Su Xizhu, but the characterization is not up to par. The heroine is a facial expression. The storyteller does not have a good grasp of the protagonist, and the logic of the entire story is unclear. Since the heroine pays a high living expenses and lives in the Lin family, what kind of interest relationship does she think she has, but the contract she signed with the Lin family is an unequal treaty. The Lin family planned to sell her from the beginning of Chapter 20, and she never thought about improving her situation. Why didn't the author tell the heroine's plan? It seems that the heroine is very brainless and cannot understand things. The Lin family was worried about her marriage, and she still felt that she had a relationship of interest with them? She obviously just resigned herself to the fish on the chopping board. The men of the Lin family were framed, but it was nothing serious and could be solved by oneself. The heroine jumped out of nowhere and became a virgin. I don't know what the author wanted to express. People were planning to sell her, but she was still rushing to stand up for someone else's broken ship? Did the author have a Madonna attack? At present, in about 30 chapters, it can be seen that the heroine may be sold to the hero as a stepmother. In female-channeled novels, the heroine who cannot understand clearly is not worthy of being the heroine, and there must be something hateful about the poor person. From the first 30 chapters, it seems that it is not a story worth reading. Since it was a waste of my time, I gave it a negative review.

It's too wordy and feels like I'm just trying to make up the word count. I really can't stand it anymore i

If you abandon the article, will the child never grow up? When I first arrived in Sioux City, I was still three or four years old. It took a long time until I got married. Cross over and get small

The narrative is long-winded, with one meaning being expressed over and over again. The water content should account for half of the overall length.

It really makes people feel that every chapter is too ridiculous and the writing style is too long-winded.

The written account is boring, the modern words such as "the corner of the mouth twitches" are too out of touch with the sense of language, the writing is patchwork, the narrative is incomprehensible, and the novel cannot grasp how to create contradictions and climaxes, so long-winded writing should be abandoned early.

I really can't stand it any longer. The story is so verbose and straightforward.

Oh my gosh, the story is pretty good, but it's too gossipy. Is this just trying to make up for the word count?