We Just Broke Up, and Now I'm Marrying a Top Succubus?

Currently, we see 95. The summary is to open high and go low. The structure of this book is mainly based on the daily and career lines of the male and female protagonists. The problem is that both lines lack firepower and have misunderstandings. First of all, the background elements are not quantified. Assuming that the reader does not understand the game community, can he understand its success just through the "500,000 online" you gave? (There is a problem with the cool feedback) The same is true for the growth of the protagonist. There is a realm in cultivating immortals, and there are positions in official circles. The growth of reputation and title is growth. According to the current thinking, the protagonist seems to have a future as a "star producer", and is deeply bound to the heroine's company and dependent on others. This means that for a long time, the protagonist cannot grow to the same level as the heroine. In terms of career, the woman is strong and the man is weak. The male and female protagonists interact (emotional line) every day. After the start, it becomes a fishing and development system. They are always ambiguous, only fishing but not eating, and no rewards (readers). You said that the emotional line should be combined with the career line, and the protagonist should grow up step by step. No problem, but your career line There is a problem, and your protagonist cannot grow. After all, you say that the protagonist is a genius, but in large and small incidents, the one who really solves the problem is the female protagonist. The name of genius is useless. At this time, your emotional line is still purely ambiguous, further deepening the label of the male protagonist as the "weak side" What I want to say is that if you can't create something exciting in the career line, it's also fun to be a good little puppy and be loved by the heroine in the emotional line. At least it is also a kind of subject. Otherwise, according to the current way of writing, the career line can't be seen at a glance, and the male and female protagonists are confused every day.

The subject matter is good, the writing is good, and the plot is smooth, but the typos are a bit confusing, especially in the first chapter. I read it two or three times in a row before I understood it. At the same time, it can be seen that the stamina is insufficient. The current plot advancement speed is relatively reasonable, but the characters and settings need to be advanced (need to be increased). The current speed will be fine. I am looking forward to the ups and downs of the subsequent plot. My monthly vote has been cast~

First of all, I don't exclude AI writing, but at least you have to write the plot smoothly. The heroine was on a business trip for three days. During the three days, she suddenly invited the hero to dinner one night, and then after three days, she told the hero that she was coming back. . . . . There is also the need to watch the scenery outside the window every night. No, the lights outside the window are really beautiful, but are the lights outside the window so beautiful? (Doge)

I've read nearly a hundred chapters, and the content is so weird that it's hard to explain in one sentence. The emotional line is very strange, the male protagonist is like a personal computer, there is no fluctuation after writing the prompt. The main timeline is obviously unreasonable. When developing a game, it feels like one test is done every day, and the public test is released on the fourth day. Tasting result: If you don't like food, don't read it😅😅

Character design: The male and female protagonists have three-dimensional personalities (the cold and domineering female protagonist × the male protagonist produced in the next year's game), the interaction is very detailed, and there is a sense of ambiguity and pull. Emotions: From the flash marriage to the heartbeat, I feel that falling in love is not far away, and the emotions are delicately portrayed. Writing style: The language is natural, close to life, the scene description is like being there, and the reading quality is strong. Three correct views: Convey independence and growth in addition to love. If you don't want to lick the dog, just get out of it.

Well enough

Speechless. It was written by AI. Don't read it. It's just a waste of time. When uploading the novel, AI's words are not deleted. That's awesome.

The previous plot went very well, but in the second half, the relationship suddenly rose so fast that I didn't understand it. You said that a relationship should start from holding hands, right? Although it was marriage first and then love, but in the second half, it was completely ruined and they suddenly became a real couple?

The overall plot is bland and confusing, with more than a hundred chapters missing, and even the AI ​​dialogues are included, and the AI ​​flavor becomes stronger and stronger later on. Originally eating at home, it directly became the "atmosphere in the car". Originally, the heroine went to Hong Kong Island for a business trip, and suddenly had a meal with the hero in the middle, and then made an appointment to come back. The sentences are not fluent either

Although the AI ​​is no longer running, I hope that the timeline and scenes can be clarified. After the AI ​​is written, it should at least be screened. As far as the plot is concerned, it is really interesting and thoughtful, and the characters are also very three-dimensional and spiritual. Generally speaking, it's like the male protagonist's "Destroyed Dog" is just like when he and Zhang Fei were imagining it together. He had an idea but what he actually put on paper was not worthy of the idea.