The Unorthodox Path to Immortality

The writing is not bad, but the emotional lines of the characters are poorly written. In order to forcefully portray the female protagonist, Twelve muddle-headedly falls in love with the male protagonist and is even willing to sacrifice his life. The male protagonist did nothing before and did not help Twelve. Instead of shaping the female protagonist in this way, it is better to let the male protagonist continue alone. Moreover, the residents in the deserted city chapter are all desperadoes. It is really awkward to forcibly portray them as heroes who are not afraid of death. At least give a suitable reason to compare the city lord to take them in and fight for the officials. If it is written like this, there will be no need to pursue it.

They say seeing is believing, so which of the two worlds in my eyes is real, or are they both fake.

This book is so weird. At first, I thought that the fairy was a villain. She only took in disciples to fatten up and kill them. But it turned out that the fairy was actually good for the protagonist. Of course, this is the end of chapter 200. I don't know if it was a role. It felt like the outline was changed. What's more, 12 fell in love with the protagonist for no reason, which confused me the most. I can't write the emotional line. Is it better not to write it?

It's a very interesting book. The plot is different from the clichés and is unique. I hope the author will work hard!

It's scary at the beginning, but it turns into a cultivator at the end. I don't really dislike it myself. I feel that the plot is not too cliche, it's quite interesting, and the updates are surprisingly fast.

One of my favorite books that I have read in recent months. The plot is fascinating, unconventional, and very creative, which makes people feel deeply involved. I beg the author to update it soon.

The combat power collapsed too quickly

How can I put it, the plot is pretty good, but I feel like it lacks a few things, and it's a pity to throw it away because it's tasteless. In addition, the protagonist is too cold-blooded, Twelve's liking is inexplicable, but the maid's growth line is okay. In fact, the realm setting should not use the traditional realm of immortality. The original setting is different from the tradition, and traditional cultivation is deeply rooted in people's hearts. Writing it this way will not make people's eyes bright, but it will be confusing. The setting of the new realm will have a much better look and feel.

It feels a bit like a book I read before, Parasite Cultivation, where insects are used to cultivate, and the world in the eyes of the protagonist is different from what others see.

Has the outline changed between authors?