Dongguan Years

The writing is quite practical, and the article is detailed and vividly describes the real feelings of the cities at the forefront of reform and opening up. Because I have also experienced it, I can say this! ! !

1. The early stage of the plot progressed relatively smoothly. The male protagonist left college to develop in a coastal area, and then met Hao Meng, the first emotionally involved female character. At this time, the career line and the emotional line still go hand in hand. 2. But in the following chapters, Jiang Fan is obviously lacking in career lines. The author mixed too many emotional lines while writing the career line. When reading, the reader feels that he is almost always writing about Jiang Fan's emotional line. 3. Jiang Fan's emotional line develops too fast. Writing like this can give readers a sense of impact in the short term, but a long online novel has already developed Jiang Fan's emotional line so quickly at the beginning, and writing the emotional line later will seem dull. The career line model has not even been mentioned in Chapter 50. 4. The emotional line is too fast and seems stiff. How could Wang Wenyu, a highly intellectual, well-educated daughter with a good family background and a good education since childhood, fall madly in love with Jiang Fan in a very short period of time and let him have some very intimate physical contact with her? Relationships are cultivated step by step, and these should be gradual, rather than being hastily introduced in a few chapters and going directly to the plot of a boyfriend and girlfriend who can be intimate. If reading a novel is treated as a meal, and the meal begins at the beginning and the last part is taken, how should one write the emotional line for the subsequent plots? 5. Jiang Fan is also a college student after all. He talks too much and swears too much. He studies in Beijing and works part-time. Shouldn't he be a humble, clean-mouthed and polite person? His character became ruthless only after experiencing hardships in the subsequent plots. It should not be mentioned in one sentence that Jiang Fan went through a lot in Dongguan. It was obvious that he had just arrived in Dongguan not long ago, and his personality changed so much. He opened and closed his mouth in a few words that were just like a gangster, and he was particularly popular with girls. This is extremely unconventional. It shows that the female character is not smart enough and has a single character image. I hope the author can realize that there are big problems with Jiang Fan's career and emotional lines. Only by laying out the details in the early stage can you have the pleasure of echoing them one by one in the later reading, instead of trying to write a three-dimensional character image of Jiang Fan in just a few chapters in the early stage.

Good-looking, exciting plot, and meaningful content

The memory of an era, the youth memories of drifters in the three stages of 60, 70 and 80. All book friends are welcome to leave pertinent comments!

I don't know what to write about the plot. It's not a career struggle, a personal struggle, or a scientific research effort. Show your personal charm every day and attract women to surround you. She had no aura of charm for twenty years, but her character exploded after she was fired. A man's smile and frown can actually attract beautiful women. Touching and messing around every day, vulgar, ignorant,

The male protagonist's character and way of doing things were in the South at that time. He didn't even know how he died, but he could still keep jumping around?

The writing is quite good, but Jiang Fan is too mythical. Let alone a person who has studied martial arts for several years, even the national Sanda champion dares to do this. Others have a hundred ways to kill him. Generally speaking,

Retreat, brothers. The protagonist who sheds tears easily and does things without any brains is no longer enough to describe the protagonist. In that dark Dongguan at that time, human life was really worthless. Where I lived at that time, there were several murders. Tell me, why did you jump like that? What? Does the heroine have a background? Nonsense.

The more I read, the more boring I get. The main character has no skills other than eating soft food and fighting fiercely. I read the book in vain. What difference does it make between a very uncultured gangster? Would the heroine fall in love with such a person? Boring

Good God, you can show off your face even if someone doesn't mess with you. You act like you are a big shot, but you don't know that you are just a clown.