Put Aside the School Beauty, I Choose the Treasure Girl

I hope that in terms of character design, the IQ and EQ of the remaining two protagonists will be slightly improved. Not to mention the girl who comes later, let's talk about the male protagonist's friends. The male protagonist has made it clear to him that he likes the female protagonist. No matter how low his IQ is, he is still a senior in high school. It is impossible that he does not have this bit of discernment. Every time there is a misunderstanding, he still shouts so loudly. Basically, he is causing trouble for the male and female protagonists. And in terms of plot, haha, the last 20 or so chapters are basically about how the heroine misunderstood, how the hero explained, and how the heroine misunderstood the hero and explained it. Being stuck in this kind of link is actually of little significance. Even if in reality, the constant misunderstandings and explanations cannot enhance the relationship between the two people. You see, the more than 100 chapters written so far are still about misunderstandings and explanations. Try to focus on a sweeter plot between the two people, and then supplement it with various misunderstandings, so as to enhance the relationship between the two and advance the plot of the overall story. From the text, there is no watery plot, but from the plot, it is really watery.

Very pretty.

Many plots are embarrassing I don't understand. The heroine was bullied by two students and smashed the lunch box. The police came. Didn't the bad guys learn a lesson? Instead, the victim, the hero, took the heroine's hand and ran away? After the male protagonist died, he saw the beautiful female protagonist and was determined to make up for his pursuit. When he first saw the female protagonist who was dark and thin, it was not because he felt sorry or pitiful, but because he was particularly disappointed. Are you reborn to chase beautiful women? And then on the first day you meet, you will say that she is your beloved girl? Written in a small steamed bun For several chapters, a brother is inseparable, and he is everywhere. The character of the heroine's mother is also funny. Her daughter is well-behaved and sensible, but when she is knocked over when delivering food, she raises her hand to hit her and scolds her when she opens her mouth. When the hero delivers food, he praises and appreciates it. Have you never eaten meat? They were bribed with just one meal, and their IQs were insulted in every scene. With so many classmates, why was it the male protagonist's turn to pick up the former Bai Yueguang and run to the infirmary?

I don't want to say more. The author is too light on the emotional line. The character description is not good. Also, when I saw the school beauty pretending to be sick, I went to help. I couldn't stand it anymore.

What a great book, please give me more and more. 😃

A plain sweet text, okay, okay

The following are purely personal opinions First, there is no system in rebirth writing. This kind of writing tests the author's writing skills the most. I suggest the author optimize it more. Second, before the protagonist was reborn, he was a person in his thirties who had emotional injuries, suffered setbacks, and experienced life and death. Then he should pay more attention to human nature. If his body is a teenager but his soul is not that way, he should not be as immature as a student, because our behavior is controlled by our thoughts. Third, the author marked the timeline of the 2008 Olympics after the college entrance examination. Unfortunately, I was in my senior year of high school in 2007. Our way of doing things at that time was definitely not as childish as in the book. After all, we are all at an age where we dare to love and hate. We will ignore anyone who doesn't like us, but we can tell who we like at a glance! Fourth, the author does not need to be obsessed with the number of words. More words does not mean the book is good. Few words may also make it a good book. Forcibly adding a bunch of annoying characters to lengthen the book will make people tired of reading it! Fifth, (I personally feel that the author is using fantasy and the past to make up for regrets) If it is written by AI, the above is pure nonsense⊙ω⊙

The writing is good. You can write some basic texts according to your situation. Come on, I am also from Guizhou.

The school days are too long. It's over 200 chapters and I'm still in high school. And for the sake of the plot, there are a lot of supporting characters who fall in love with the female lead and the male lead. It's really baffling. There are not many normal people in this show.

The plot is very strange, with no characteristics and no story. There is a lot of psychological description but very little expression. The male protagonist is really ink, but the female protagonist is inconsistent. The characters of the supporting characters are also very distorted, and I can't see what the author wants to express. There are also strange subplots. It took so long to write a competition. Does this book have anything to do with the scenes between the principal and the teacher? If these branch plots are mentioned at once, they will not affect the content of the main plot at all. It can be said that they have nothing to do with the main plot of the male and female protagonists, and they are just writing another story🐂🍺