Sutra of Immortality of Chaos

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The introduction is domineering, I like it very much. The protagonist kills decisively, has no flaws, is not smart, and the writing is not bad, but can it be updated faster? Rewarded!

It's too ordinary, almost to the point where it doesn't look good. The setting throws a lot of things at the reader, such as the division of realms, and it is all stated at once. It is difficult to remember what other realms are later, and the readers are confused as to which one is right. The division of realms is therefore very vague. The characteristics of each realm are not explained, and there are no landmarks to prove which realm one has reached. After watching it for so long, I can only remember one: Having green light and being able to fly is the foundation building. There are too few psychological descriptions, scene descriptions, action descriptions, appearance descriptions, language descriptions, and plot foreshadowing. There are a lot of dialogues, too many, and they are quite blunt and awkward. If you want to create a playful, cute, enchanting character, etc., Without a suitable narrative, it is difficult to make readers empathize and leave a character impression. The tone of speaking also feels very inappropriate. One second he is speaking very seriously, and the next second he starts driving. Driving just for the sake of driving is a bit too vulgar. The four-character words and idioms feel like they are used just for the sake of being used. There are too many and too complicated, and I personally can't appreciate them anyway. In terms of plot, not to mention the abnormal father at the beginning, the protagonist, the second generation of the first immortal, is actually obsessed with the beauty of the lower plane. If you want to explain that they are all the separated souls of Empress Ling Xin, and finally merge into the Great Empress, that would be enough. This would explain why they are addicted to these beauties. And as a second-generation Immortal, coupled with such a good talent, the realm is so slow to improve. Every time he jumps to a higher level to challenge, it is just one or two major realms. There is no description of the battle scenes. I don't feel the difficulty of jumping higher levels, and I can't beat it inexplicably. After reading these 60 chapters, I feel like I can't stand it anymore. I read it in a dull way, with no emotion at all, and read the text mechanically. In addition, I didn't think much about the plot of this book, and I can't remember the plot clearly. That's it, as my last suggestion before I withdraw the book, I hope that when I am in a book shortage again in the future, I can see an eye-catching work, and the author is you.

Qin Chen kills decisively, not like the Virgin, and the supporting characters are flesh and blood. I hope Qin Chen can rescue Yan Ruyu as soon as possible and kill the living dead as soon as possible! ! !

If you see a woman talking too much, your woman will be taken away by others soon. It is unreasonable to take away spiritual roots at will. People with high-level spiritual roots will not be able to grow normally. There will always be people with higher levels than you to take away your spiritual roots. The world will be in chaos and eventually lead to destruction by taking each other's spiritual roots.

In Chapter 73, the author already knew that the empress followed reincarnation, and in Chapter 155, he said that reincarnation is impossible.

I've always been invincible. Levels are useless. I should just become a god.

Come on come on I'm optimistic about you

It looks good, the writing is nice, the plot is tight, and the pace is off the charts.

So pretty