My Roommate Is a Vixen

After writing it for so long, the only scenes that I found sweet were the time when Han Xiaoyue took the love potion and Liu Shuang handed her over for the first time, and these were the only two scenes in total. Although the plot is good, this kind of writing is not like a romance novel or a fantasy novel. It just doesn't look very pure. It feels like there's a little bit of each type. Secondly, regarding the emotional line, Liu Shuang's was okay, but Han Xiaoyue's was very strange. Originally, Han Xiaoyue used Zhang Fan as a thug tool, and she had to have an opportunity to know that she liked Zhang Fan, but she just felt that she fell in love with him inexplicably. And I hope the author can play with stacking boxes, that is, continue to write about Han Xiaoyue and Liu Shuang after the Thunder Tribulation Realm, or who else, or there is a magic weapon that can take so and so, and then go to the fairy world, and then the fairy world is another story. For specific examples, please refer to "Shock!" My apprentice turned out to be the Empress" Qin Tian, ​​the male protagonist. Overall, the author's writing is quite good. I complain so much, but I definitely can't write it. If you dare to write and publish, you, the author, are the best!

The protagonist in this book is quite crazy! As a department manager, he kills people when he says he will, and he kills people in front of shareholders. You are so brave. What do you think of the country? There are also courts and prisons. They all belong to your family. I feel that I will use force to solve problems at every turn. They start fighting if they disagree with each other. You always find trouble with those chaebols. You think those chaebols are so easy to bully. You don't know their relationship with the government, right? If you beat someone casually in the real world, you will definitely end up in a detention center if you have no background. In this story, the protagonist seems to be innocent. The author, you wrote it really well. It's extremely cool, but it doesn't work for me. I don't like watching it so cool, and the villain is at least at a kindergarten level, and he has to do everything himself. If they don't agree with each other, they take bodyguards to beat the protagonist. And you are still watching from the side, don't you know how to avoid it?

The whole text is pretty good. It can obviously be divided into two parts, one is Zhang Fan and Liu Shuang's urban life in Donghai City, and the other is Zhang Fan and Han Xiaoyue's journey of saving the Tianji Sect from zero to success and finally to the top. I feel like the author mainly wants to write about cultivating immortals, but the urban part takes up a bit too much. The part about cultivating is okay without the pure and refreshing feeling. I can feel the progress of the protagonist, but the emotional part is a little less. It would be great if there is a follow-up.

Updates are too slow. Can the author try updating four episodes a day😁😁

Looks good, Oye

The first few chapters were pretty good, but once I got to school it wasn't working anymore and it just turned into a mindless and cool story with all kinds of NC villains.

Hurry up and update more, and try to keep updating daily. Otherwise there won't be many people watching.