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It feels like it's not finished yet, and there should be a sequel.

Well written

Come on

How should I put it, after watching it for so long, I feel that it is a bit bland, the plot is about the same, except for the protagonist, everyone else is always arrogant and always suspicious of the protagonist. Then, the heroine with the aura of the protagonist has demonstrated countless times how I became a burden to the protagonist. The protagonist is a little dangerous, and she must die, so she goes in to help the protagonist increase the difficulty of the danger, protect her and face the danger! Too many times, I can't stand it anymore, it's a bit brainless! Abandon the trap🕳️! ! !

The protagonist's maid has no autonomy at all, so she just goes up to the protagonist when she sees danger. She doesn't think about whether she is useful or not, and will it affect the master's plan? The heroine written like this is like a silly sweet girl, which is not very good-looking.

You can look at it without thinking

The writing is too verbose

The plot design is good, but the writing is not good. There are too many words. The protagonist reads one thing once, several people discuss it once, the protagonist thinks several times in his heart, the protagonist thinks several times when making a decision, and there are many repetitions ten times.

Chapter 45 is so childish, don't write it if you don't know how to write a love story.

Childish