Quick Travel Guide: the World-Weary Male Protagonist Is Madly Criticized

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This article has a lot of typos and the plot is too slow. It's cruel to write 93 chapters in one scene.

The writing is not bad, but the plot is a bit boring (･⊝･∞). I also hope that the author can correct the typos! Please! ✌︎( ᐛ )✌︎

The emotions are rich and strong, the intense and shocking feeling that goes straight into the heart. This is like a real living person, and some thoughts are unguessable.

Overall, this quick travel article is quite good, although the A Small World article is quite long. It's different from the fast-traveling stories I've read before. The story follows the male protagonist attacking the female protagonist in order to atone for his sins and make the female protagonist calm down. The relationship between the male protagonist and the female protagonist is fate. The heroine Bai Mianmian becomes a humble maid in the second world (the background is the world of human, demon, fairy, and monster cultivators) in order to complete the mission of fast travel, and finally falls in love with the male protagonist Demon Lord Meng Jingzhan. The main story is in the second world. The heroine is a vine demon on the edge of the cliff, and because of the hero's drop of blood, she transformed into a human being. The male protagonist was severely injured due to being surrounded and suppressed by all walks of life and transformed back into his true form (black fox). In order to save him, the female protagonist injected demon power (original power) into him to repair his meridians. Later, Su Luo, the daughter of the Daoxian sect of the Little World heroine, saw that the black fox (the male protagonist) was injured and pitiful, so she took him back to recuperate and took good care of him. But the male protagonist Meng Jingzhan feels that Suluo's care for him is like a ray of light in his dark world. When I saw Su Luo, the heroine of Small World, full of admiration for the disciple Su Ci, the male protagonist of Small World, I felt dazzled and wanted to destroy it. I just wanted those eyes to only see me. (I also don't understand that it was the heroine Bai Mianmian who saved his meridians to prevent him from dying. Isn't she his savior? He still wants to keep Bai Lianhua's eyes forever and ignore his savior. What a fool.) He said that in order to improve his strength and practice evil arts, the leader Su Niu of the so-called "famous and upright sect" of Daoxian Sect built a secret room in his own room, established a blood pool, imprisoned and bled people from the demon clan and demon clan, and practiced evil arts by absorbing their blood. The eldest disciple, Su Ci, stole the sect's blood fruits in order to increase his strength. (This blood fruit is still the sacred fruit of the demon clan. Su Niu and the demon clan Hua Biao teamed up to deal with the Yellow Dog clan and caused the Yellow Dog clan to be wiped out. Hye Biao gave it to Su Niu.) However, because it was picked up by the male protagonist Meng Jingzhan, the male protagonist ate the blood fruit to recover some skills and replaced the "blood fruit" that Su Ci thought was a magic fruit. Later, Su Ci became possessed by the devil. Later, Su Luo found out that the black fox was the demon king and killed him without hesitation, blaming himself for remorse for saving the demon clan. The male protagonist Meng Jingzhan was heartbroken, but he was still willing to save his life despite being surrounded by his sect. Later, the male protagonist returns to the Demon Realm, and the female protagonist Bai Mianmian comes to the male protagonist to repay her kindness and becomes a humble maid. (Bai Mianmian's mission is to prevent the destruction of the world, and he fell in love with Meng Jingzhan during the mission) The female protagonist Bai Mianmian has done a lot for the male protagonist Meng Jingzhan and devoted her emotions. Even though she knows that the male protagonist has his "Bai Yueguang" Suluo in his heart, she is still willing to give her life for the male protagonist. In the end, the heroine Bai Mianmian died, returned to the quick travel bureau, and slept for a while, sealing up this memory in order to forget everything. The male protagonist only understands his love after the female protagonist dies. (Book friends say: belated love is worse than grass.) The male protagonist searches for the heroine's soul everywhere, but finds that there is no trace in this world. He tears apart time and space and disrupts three thousand worlds to find her. Later, a master told him that the heroine was a soul from another world. If he wanted to find her again, he had to wash away his own evil consequences. Only after seven souls and three souls had been burned by karma for thousands of years could he have a chance to see her. This is how Bai Mianmian was eaten up and wiped clean by him, saying that she would be waiting for him in the Three Thousand Worlds, and even called her Citadel. In the first world, the system Gouzi allows the female protagonist to attack the male protagonist. In this world, the male protagonist enjoys the benefits and has children with the female protagonist. In the second world, the heroine regains her memory, and in the following world, the hero calms down the heroine and conquers the heroine. The progress bar displayed by the system on the heroine's side is the heroine's relief value, which is quite interesting. If the heroine is never willing to forgive the hero, her soul will be destroyed and cease to exist in the reincarnation of three thousand worlds.

The sentences don't make sense, there are a lot of typos, and the plot is a bit... Uh... It jumps too fast. Think about it, a person who you can say we have nothing in common with, and we haven't seen each other for four or five years, insists on staying in your house and kissing you. Can you handle it? (Personal opinion, don't comment if you don't like it)

There are so many typos! ! ! And da ba means don't want it! ! !

How should I put it? The story is too long and does not follow the development of the plot very closely. There are more than 60 chapters in one chapter. If it is related to the center, it would be OK, but there are too many things about career, and the favorability is inexplicable.

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It's cool and clever, but there are a few typos.