Super Blacksmith Shop

It was already evening when I got home. (Yang Guang) didn't care about anything else. He just cleared the table. Then he took out several small bags in the bag. The pearls in each bag were different in appearance and price. (Yang Guang) was going to use them for experiments (with) It was already evening when I got home. I took out several small bags from the bag. The pearls in each bag had different appearance and prices. They were prepared for experiments. There are two words in one sentence (Yang Guang?) It's like when I go home to eat and when I go home to eat Did my sister ask me to buy something? What is (your sister)? Can't it be (my sister asked me to buy it)? Author, you said that you have to have 30-50 sentences in each chapter. Each sentence is appended with a lot of extra words. The actual content is pitiful. A chapter is 3,000 words, of which at least one or two thousand words are unnecessary nonsense. I know that the author's word count is related to his income. But trying to add words like this is like a bottle of Maotai mixed with 10 bottles of water. Do you think it is better to sell Moutai or Moutai that has been mixed with 10 bottles of water? How much does it cost to sell? Your novel is equivalent to a bottle of Maotai, not in bulk or Erguotou and other mass-market wines. If it were mass-market wine, I wouldn't read it or comment on whether you mix it with water or not. What I want to buy is your Maotai. But you act as if the readers are the boss. You have to mix a bottle of Maotai with 10 bottles of water and sell it to readers. How many people do you think will buy it? I think the author's writing level is quite good, but there is too much nonsense. If you can streamline it, it will definitely be a classic book. It is not impossible to become a great god.

If there are too many female authors in this book, just criticize them directly. Old bookworms will definitely not read it. Don't give up on your main plot. People who read your book will only come in based on the title of the book. Do you understand? Are all the novels nowadays written by others? Does anyone read your writing style? So don't be biased, deal with the women as soon as possible. The protagonist can go out to find women if he needs it, but don't fall in love. In addition, don't have werewolves, vampires, etc. In this book. They are all bad. You can write a little more skill, so the grades will gradually go up. At least there will be people chasing you for your next book. Not many people will like a bad love protagonist, and you can't control yourself.

For every 10 words written, there must be more than 3 words that are redundant. There is no need to add these 3 extra words to embellish it. The book is originally good, but there are a few redundant words in every sentence. After reading one or two chapters, it feels too ink-filled. Adding some unnecessary explanations about the sources of items makes it even more ink-filled. I hope the author can simplify it as follows. Soldiers are more valuable than too many. Just don't add too much. Compared with telling friends in reality, I WC and I have to go to WC at this time. If the author talks to friends, parents, and every sentence with a lot of redundant language, then no one will like it. I just suggest that the author can write a better book. There is no other meaning. Because I have read this book so far, except for the ink marks, it is quite good. I like it very much.

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The system of the protagonist's blacksmith shop can be used to synthesize, decompose, and convert jewelry and so on, so it is accepted casually. Why can it strengthen the body because the blacksmith exercises his body by swinging a hammer? I'm way off topic; you can either change the name of the plug-in and not call it the blacksmith shop, or start from the actual function of the blacksmith shop and get plug-in equipment for the safety of the protagonist; strengthen the physical body. . . Does this mean that the blacksmith shop has the function of longevity or immortality: or does the protagonist want to use his body to build a career? Which successful person and high-ranking person do you think did it with his hands and feet?

After seeing the part about decomposing pearls in the first chapter, I wanted to ask if the mussel meat from which the pearls are obtained is edible? Is it delicious? Drooling!

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I just read two chapters. They are pretty good. The only regret is that the ink marks are huge and there is a lot of nonsense. For example, Yang Guang doesn't really like bars, KTVs and other places. Also, I am short of money. Is there no need for such ink marks to write a sentence? That's okay. I don't really like nightclubs and entertainment venues. I'm also short of money. The author shouldn't always add the protagonist's name in every sentence. I'm also short of money. Isn't that okay? Why not add another one? I'm talking about the little pearl at the beginning of the chapter. Just decompose it if you want. Don't introduce how you got the little pearl. There are many unnecessary introductions and various explanations. Don't take out the ink. We are all adults. We are not mentally retarded. For example, the author writes that the protagonist decomposes nail clippers. Don't introduce the protagonist's age. Where and when. Why did I buy nail clippers? What did I do with them after buying them? I also observed that they were made of iron. I found out what kind of craftsmanship was used. What are the ingredients of iron and steel? How did iron and steel come from? I was explaining how iron ore is mined and how it is prospected. Is this too ink? The author's details are extremely exaggerated. There is no need for this.

I will go home and write my diary. And. I will go back to my home and write my diary.

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