Slaves of Purgatory

Ye Yu came to congratulate on the new book, oh, my name is Momo now, come on, let's achieve great results again~

Congratulations on the release of the first natural book. I'm here to send you a congratulatory message after it's over... To express that I have collected it... 🤭🤭🤭🤭🤭🤭[fn =1]🤭🤭🤭🤭🤭🤭🤭🤭🤭🤭🤭

🌹🌹Write well and keep working hard

First, this book should simplify any dull plot and write it faster. Second, this book should write about ** in detail. Third, this book should create simple character cards for the characters, so as to prevent the characters from suddenly collapsing. Fourth, when the protagonist does something, even if he wants to save the world, he should do it if he wants to do it, and if he doesn't want to do it, he should not do it. Above. Natural oil.

Everyone who wants to write a story must have a different inner world from everyone else. What makes a writer insist on coding and write a story of millions of words? It's not boring, nor is it for the royalties, it's a hobby, it's the joy of sharing stories from your heart with readers! Especially for friends who are also newcomers, coding is relatively slow and their popularity is low. A compliment from a reader will make a newcomer extremely happy. Where there is praise, there will be criticism. Whether you are a master or a novice, you may or may not support your work. It is impossible to satisfy everyone. I guess you, the author, have also struggled with whether to describe a scene from sound to scene, or from scene to sound. When you write about some funny parts, do you think the readers will laugh? You think your writing is outstanding, but readers don't seem to notice it, so you are disappointed. I hope a reader can read your article carefully and analyze it carefully! Writing can improve one's own knowledge, enable people to understand things, and pay attention to the small details in life. Each person's personality characteristics can be exaggerated and written into the story. Although the author created a world, many events still have to be compared to the world we live in. Everyone's writing has its own sharpness, and everyone's story has its own merits, so you can see your own shortcomings in every article. Commenting on other people's articles not only provides support to the author, but also improves my own writing level and allows me to see my own shortcomings, so I will continue to read other people's works to improve myself. Having said so much, I hope the author will continue to write for his original hobby! Put aside the fame or not, just for the original hobby! Come on! 🌹🌹

How much you like it, how hard you work, how much you work hard, how much success you have. Sometimes you may not be accepted by others at first, but gradually, as long as you can believe in your charm, someone will feel it. Some people always say that if you persevere, the road ahead will be bumpy. But in fact, the reason why perseverance is needed is because the road ahead is long. It may be so long that you can't see the end at a glance, but that's why it's valuable to move forward. I don't think about fame first, I don't think about profit first, I don't even think about whether anyone will like to see it. But at the very least, I think that only by pursuing and ensuring your own style, your own characteristics, and your own purest words can you truly impress your own readers. Come on! ! Everything starts at the beginning, and it's never too late to start. People can save their lives and have the qualifications and rights to fight for their dreams!

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Due to personal habits, I may not have read carefully. Please forgive me if there is something wrong in what I said. The first volume that I started with seems pretty good, and the content of each chapter is well connected, but it would be nice if things could be described more clearly, such as the confusion caused by the changes in the environment after the Seventh Demon King suddenly pulled those soldiers into the game, and the psychological activities of the soldiers when they watched their comrades die in front of their eyes. That's right! It would be better if the author could complete the operation method of "Death Chess" (especially after the chess player gives instructions, how do the soldiers as chess pieces move??? Are they forced to move while maintaining their consciousness? Or are they subconsciously guided? Or do they obey the chess player's instructions voluntarily? In this process, the soldiers should all have some flesh, so they should also have different psychological activities. If some necessary descriptions are given to them, it will make the story more vivid) But starting from the second volume, I wonder if it's because I didn't read the original work or because I didn't read it carefully? Anyway, I always feel that there is a bit of disconnect between the chapters or even the content within a chapter. This feeling is particularly obvious around chapter 60. In this regard, it is recommended that the author add some transitional plots at the end of chapters, at least not to make the content between chapters too abrupt. The third volume feels better than the second volume, but I personally think it would be better to write more details about Alice's admission process? ? 🤔 I feel like there are a lot of things to write about here, such as the principal's reaction to the hero's enrollment, the protagonist's request to hide his identity, whether the principal informed the mainland about the hero's return, etc. By the way... Does it mean that my back hurts when I stand and talk? ? ? Well~! In fact, the author Jun's writing is quite good. Come on, I'll wait for you to be awesome! 😄 ... Eh! ? What else do I want to say (dumb) Wait, let me think about it again. (Put your chin in a contemplative pose) Um... Right! I remembered! (Thumping hands) Author Jun, your daughter's character and settings are inconsistent in various ways! Think of a way! Alice-chan is totally free now! (I didn't pay much attention to the facial expression, but it seems that the skill has been broken? Wu Kou's words... Is this really Wu Kou 😅 who often talks in long paragraphs... But Wu Xin's words seem to have stopped since the second volume)

What the hell is it that "the place under the neck that cannot be described" is already so "indescribable"~ The good atmosphere was ruined like this. Is there any 233 that you can see with a smile?

All right. After looking at the first two pictures, I couldn't figure out the scene at all. Alas, the description is still rather jerky. There is no description of the main character in the previous chapters. How can I tell you how tall the girl is and what her face is? . . Etc. I suggest you read and study [Loli** Detective Agency] to see how people describe Lolita, especially their characters. [Fn=2_9]

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