I'm in College, but the System Insists That I'm a Druid.

It feels like the pace is a bit fast. It depends on how long you plan to write, otherwise I might not be able to write it long. The first two chapters were a bit too fast until I got to the more mysterious things and felt better. When I joined that Tang later, it was too fast. One was that the literal behavioral motivations were too fast; the other was that the old guy instilled so many things into the protagonist too quickly. It's not that the protagonist won't be able to accept it, but that readers will forget about it after reading it. Then more work can be done on the character creation. At first, Jian Yue seemed not to care about anything, but then he suddenly changed when he got to school. For example, in Chapter 14, it was a bit inconsistent. If you want to express her character, you can consider the essence and motivation, what is her character, what is she interested in, and then why do you want to ask this question or learn about this matter, and then unify the tone and style of speaking (actually this part is done well, but the entry point of speaking does not feel consistent, and it feels like she is not the same person). In fact, after writing the setting, I tried to put myself in her shoes. Maybe I didn't read it, mainly because I couldn't understand why she suddenly cared about the male protagonist, and what she said when she was beaten. In addition, the connection of some funny places is not very appropriate. Too little non-verbal description will lead to insufficient three-dimensional character creation. Non-verbal description also includes the tone of speaking, etc. The rhythm of the text should follow the character's personality. For example, if the person is in a hurry, it can be faster, and if the person is deserted, it can be slower. Non-verbal description is what best reflects the growth of a character. There is no need for a period at the end of the paragraph, just a few hundred words less. The above are all relatively minor issues. In general, as a web article, it is very well written and it is a relatively new subject matter. Then the suspense is left just right, and the plot logic is very clear. Unfortunately, it is a bit obsessed with advancing the main line, and there is no daily description, which indirectly leads to the too fast pace. In addition, the writing style is good, and there is no praise for AI.

Come up with some extraordinarily abstract ideas. Let me see if I can sew them in horizontally.

I thought it was a one-of-a-kind kind of thing.

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There are no periods in several paragraphs, and the quotation marks are messed up. It looks really weird. Withdraw, withdraw.