Dungeon: This Evil Spirit Only Sees Intensity

For reference, the Korean comic "Become a Barbarian and Survive in Another World"?

But was the pressure a little too high initially? After reading Chapter 16, I felt a little out of breath and needed some space for the reader and the protagonist to relax.

As the title states, the coin author discussed with the editor and decided to change the title and introduction. However, because he forgot to change the introduction two days ago to correct typos, he had to change it again four days later. As a result, the current introduction does not match the title of the book, which directly worsens the already bleak traffic. This round of competition is probably mailed, so I can only mention it a little bit in the comment area. Mouth, struggling stubbornly_(:з∠)_... ...... ——The following is the official introduction of this book ......... (non-DND text, only dungeon elements) [Starting barbarian, do you choose temporary ease or ultimate growth? "Of course... Fight for the future." [You found a dying elf girl, she seems to be being hunted by predators] "Predators? It depends on the specific number..." [You found that this elf girl has the most extreme talent for summoning elemental elves, and with a little training, she can become the top elf user. "Let's destroy them all, and we must not leave any survivors. … As a barbarian, it should be a shame to be pushed down by a delicate elf, but if the other party is a team phantom god with full strength, Gu Mo feels that it should be his turn to reflect on whether he has been too lazy recently and has not satisfied the other party.

Why hasn't it been updated yet😭

It's very interesting. I like the feeling of playing the game at a high level and walking through difficult copies.

Seeing Chapter 12, I feel pretty good.

Not enough😆😆😆

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Suddenly I found a typo in the introduction, and rule 4 became preparation 4

A new writer, it seems a bit raw. Let's do this. Send me the saved manuscript and I'll take a look at it for you.

Just passing by, I am the third one to post

Overall, it's pretty good, and the writing is relatively smooth. However, there is a common problem in this type of online game time-travel novels for master players, which is that the protagonist needs to have a golden finger that is almost "omniscient" about game information, but also needs to retain the sense of unknown exploration of the adventure story. The current protagonist gives me the feeling that it is more like a routine speed-through game. No matter what situation I encounter, even the boss can completely predict the action. There is no surprise or fright at all, and there is no fun of exploring the unknown in the adventure story. This is not to say that the writing is not good, but there is a contradiction between the almost "omniscient" protagonist and the unknown plot development in the setting. I hope the author can grasp the plot development well and let the protagonist make more improvised and unknown decisions.

It's very interesting, but it's too urgent and makes people breathless. Let the protagonist become stronger.

What happened to Chapter 12? In Chapter 11, you are still in a coma, and in Chapter 12, you start fighting monsters and looking for teammates. Don't you feel that something is missing in between? What about waking up and returning to rest? Also, has the ranger found the protagonist? There are none of these, so you just skip it and start a new plot?