Tokyo: My Problems Come from the Girls Around Me

The male protagonist is like a human machine. He can just scare someone as stupid as this.

After a brief review, the writing, characters, and plot are quite good, but the logic problems are too serious 🙂

There is no reason for the protagonist not to tell Koike after becoming a girl's confession manga assistant. Why didn't Qiu Shuiyue tell her that the protagonist knows Izayoi's true identity? It is very dangerous no matter what you say to the applicant who knows your true identity.

Let's talk about the advantages first As a newcomer to Nikkei, at least at the starting point, the writing is very smooth, the plot is connected naturally, it is not a day-to-day running account, and the characters are also very unique, and the several female characters have distinct personalities. Especially for Saionji Ruri, it can be seen that the author must have worked hard in this aspect. It is not a formulaic copy of familiar characters, and many scenes are written with a sense of reading a comic. It is rare for domestic Nikkei to give me this feeling Let's talk about the shortcomings The biggest shortcoming is that some plots have relatively big logical problems, which are the kind of problems that can be seen at a glance as long as you don't just scan ten lines. But fortunately, these problems are relatively minor, and they are not the kind that cause the entire incident to collapse. It is similar to how you feel comfortable watching the whole thing, but if you look carefully at a certain corner, you will get a very conspicuous little thorn, which is very uncomfortable. The first question is that at the beginning, 99 was drawing the scene of Koike being confessed by someone else. In the next 25 chapters, he turned around and said that the person he saw was similar to Koike. He was obviously confirmed to be Koike himself, right? The second problem is that Qiu Shanyue directly arranged the interview location at the protagonist's home. This seems very counter-intuitive at first glance. The author has patched it later, so this is okay. I think the patch made later makes sense. But you should say it directly in the chapter of the online communication interview, instead of just saying that you will go to your home for an interview without any reason. Normally, you should go to the editor's office, or make an appointment in a public place such as a study room, right? The third question is updated today. Previously, it was written that Kitamura Moe rode on the male protagonist's shoulders to get the book. In the next chapter, the male protagonist took the book to Kitamura Moe. What does this mean? It feels like the author has the same memory as a goldfish The fourth problem is the part where Akiyama Yue prevents 99 and the male protagonist from getting to know each other. It feels like an ancient plot, forcibly creating conflicts. This is the only design that makes me feel cliché, and it is clumsy. And this also extends A problem arises, that is, when faced with a male protagonist who is not acquainted with him, 99 makes a video call without warning. He even forgets that the camera is still on and walks around without clothes after taking a shower (I remember this). This is actually equivalent to what 99 would do if the assistant was not the male protagonist. I have It's been a long time since I've seen the welfare section written like this The fifth problem is that the author's name is not good. The author named the male protagonist's sister Shimizu Masato. For readers who are not familiar with the Japanese naming rules, I can help convert it. This name corresponds to the domestic name, which is quite good. It feels so inconsistent that you named a woman born in 2000 after Song Wenjie In general, it is at a level where flaws are not concealed. The advantages are outstanding, but the shortcomings are also obvious. I am still willing to read it, as long as the author does not continue to make minor mistakes later.

Is Kitamura also the heroine? When she first appeared, she felt like a passerby

The author can try a structure of 3 female protagonists and 2 female supporting characters. In fact, it is equivalent to writing the three female protagonists who entered the finals as usual, and the two female protagonists whose scenes were cut off, you write them as female supporting characters, but there is still an emotional line interaction, which can be rough, most people will not mind it. Originally, when the number of female protagonists is too large, they will naturally lose sight of one. It is common for the quantity and quality of scenes to be inconsistent. In the end, you can collect all five of them together, and it doesn't matter if you wrap the sushi in a mediocre way. The key point is never to miss a girl. In online articles, the destructive power caused by flaws in the love line is far less than that of missing a girl. Especially the light novel area is very sensitive to this. The author should consider it.

Let me talk about myself first. I am the last person to have a master's degree in 985 books. In my opinion, Dongda is not as high as 985 in the upper reaches of Qingbei. In terms of medicine, it is at the level of Peking University. If you graduate from liberal arts and enter politics, looking at the state of Japanese politics, you won't be able to make money without corruption. Medical students have to undergo training for so long, and it is not easy to make money before the age of 35. It may be faster to evaluate professional titles in academics, but it is also very hard.

The writing style is very Japanese. It is very comfortable to read.

After reading the free chapters, the writing is very good. The male protagonist is not naughty. The female protagonists have their own characteristics. The supporting characters are not shameless and very popular. But the author said that only 3 entered the finals. Then there are sisters who are liked by many people. Editor Teacher, what should I do with these people?

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✒️Writing: There is no problem with writing, better than most new writers, not like new writers👍 🎬 Plot: Too little at the moment, but quite attractive 🎭 Character design: The three-dimensional is not flat, and the personality characteristics of the main character can be clearly felt from the beginning.

The current plot is very interesting and this book has great potential

Yes, the food and grass are currently on the higher side, and the character creation is not flat either. Another great advantage is that the main mission is clearly advanced and the plot rhythm is very good. Doesn't look like a new author

Signed! 300 Points! Thank you author, I knew you could do it!

Did the author change the name? This name doesn't feel right. I didn't know it was describing Goldfinger at first.

Come on

It's a very good book. It's natural that the score will increase tenfold.

It's good to read, please read it, Chen Shang Jian Tu is here to visit!

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Very beautiful😡

The writing of Xiyuanji Liuli is very interesting.