Ultraman: I Can Forcefully Log into Your Body

I came here for the name Nexus. I found that the author made the same mistakes I often made before. First, I added too many details that I thought needed to be described. Actually not necessary. Readers of Qidian most likely are not here to see you write so many details. As long as the coolness is in place, the other details will probably be logical. You have arranged too many details, but not enough interesting points, so it is impossible for people to continue reading. Second, in the third golden chapter, the protagonist did not enter the state quickly. Nowadays, various headline parties are prevalent on various platforms. If you can't catch the reader's attention right away, there won't be any follow-up reading. For example, the protagonist gains the ability to transform in the first chapter, transforms into Nexus in the second chapter, and kills a monster in the third chapter. Another crisis occurs in Chapter 4, and a solution comes up in Chapter 5... If you write at this pace, you should be able to retain twice as many readers. But now... Many people want to run away after reading the beginning of what you wrote. Thirdly, the writing power is insufficient, and the plot becomes distorted as it is written. You must figure out which ones are the main trunk and which ones are unnecessary branches and leaves. The exciting part is the fruit that makes people want to continue reading. No one wants to stare at the wood and chew on it. You have to quickly bring the fruit up to people to taste. I don't know if you have heard of it. In order to write a slap-in-the-face plot, an author first suppressed the protagonist for dozens of chapters, and then wrote the slap-in-the-face plot. As a result, I was scolded terribly. Be sure to pay attention to the choices and remove those useless, word-counted, and meaningless descriptions. Finally, let me emphasize again that everyone is here to see your Ultraman novel. I'm not here to see you write about how the protagonist makes a living using his photography skills in the different world of Japan.

The pace of the opening chapter is too flat, and there is no direct crisis in the near future, which means that the protagonist lacks a strong driving force to participate in the plot, and there is no clear short-term goal, resulting in no intuitive highlights. This is the main problem. Secondly, the dialogue is too watery, and the amount of information is too little. There is no need to write so much. It is better to put this thing in the middle and later stages to improve the word count. It is best not to exceed 30% of the opening dialogue content.

The name is seriously inconsistent with the content, and it is in line with the theme of Nexus. It can vaguely see the author's thoughts, which is a good idea (The author just insists on writing according to his own ideas, the writing is great)

Let me remind you that it was never stated in the show that Nexus's name was always called Ultraman. I only said this in the last episode

I watched Nexus seven or eight years ago. My DVD remote control was lost at home, so I watched the first half of Nexus five or six times before finishing it I saw some comments saying that the protagonist was being beaten all the time. How can I put it, from the perspective of a novel, this book is somewhat unqualified, but the current Nexus chapter alone includes some stream of consciousness and memory killings, which feels like the original film And although it is a system stream, the protagonist's performance can currently be said to be qualified or even stronger than most of the new generation Ultraman Come on, author, Nai's difficulty is indeed high. In the next world, with the power of fetters, you can intervene in more things and pursue a better ending.

I have no idea what this protagonist is going to do, Riddler.

Actually, I want to write, Aix. If you leave the most messages, I can give priority to it.

After watching the show, come here to gather, squirt or do whatever you want, please comment.

It's a bit daily, so this kind of writing is not suitable for slow reading. People write about daily life and love life. The author may want to describe bonds or something, but he has strayed from the topic. Take the Ultraman TV series as an example. If they film it like this, no one will watch it.

The idea for this book came from seeing the new generation Dyna and Dekai being hacked in person. When I wrote it, I basically opened the old cat's Ultraman Fighting Evolution and copied it (written). But now the problem is so serious that the writing style is a bit nondescript.

After reading the introduction, I feel that the future is promising. I will add a bookshelf to wait and see.

If you can't capture the readers' interest in the golden three chapters, you won't be able to retain them. The opening chapter is too flat. Not many people have the heart to follow you every day. The opening chapter is all about the protagonist looking for a job and survival. It's too standard and too flat.

There is nothing we can do about this volume. The pace of the next volume should be faster.

Well, he's actually the second black guy. Let's see when you fight.

Several Owen books have become eunuchs, let's see how long this one can hold up.