Hanmai Volume 1

After reading the first chapter, I will briefly summarize the content, and then give my opinion: The first part, go to the emperor (foreshadowing, I don't understand the meaning, but guess it is the author hinting that the little people overturned the old dynasty), the main text is when Fu Shui had knitted straw sandals and imagined a better life, he was taken away by the county officials, his wife gave him a piece of cake, and he left wearing the old straw sandals, just in Chen Sheng's team Let me talk about the advantages first: 1. The overall taste is right, the characters' images and lines are in line with the background of the times, and it reads right, and the wife's lines are very touching. 2. The details are rich and the metaphors are vivid: the wife presses the cake to confirm the softness and hardness, the straw sandals are almost worn out; the red characters on the enlistment roll are like coagulated blood. Let's talk about areas that can be improved (for reference only): The author's description of the environment and imagery is a bit too much, the meaning is unclear, and it seems very cumbersome. I probably feel that the author is trying to create an atmosphere, but is completely overkill. I will rewrite this paragraph for you, please read it: The cold wind of late autumn roars from the north bank of the Weishui River and pours into the towering tower of Xianyang Palace. The young halberd wielder stood under the corridor outside the palace, quiet and solemn, with the only sound of the black flag above his head. He did not dare to raise his head. The palace was extremely quiet, and you could hear a needle drop. Looking towards the palace from the corner of his eye, he saw a person sitting on the throne. His crown is hanging, and the twelve strings of jade beads are shaking slightly, showing no sign of self-importance. The knuckles of the hands pressing on the bronze armrest were blue and red - it was impossible to tell whether it was due to excessive force or the cold weather. At the foot of the steps, the officials knelt down. Suddenly, a sound passed through, and the halberd man's whole body shook suddenly. The voice was not loud, but deep and powerful, like a stone being smashed into a deep hole: "Go to Thailand and hold the emperor." This situation is also very serious later. When writing online articles, you must respect the rules of online articles, do not make long paragraphs, and do not include useless details. You must know that details also serve the plot and character image. If you can support the character image in one sentence, why bother writing three or four sentences? If one sentence can create an atmosphere, why bother spending two or three sentences? I hope the author will write better and better and sign the contract as soon as possible.

In Chapters 1 and 2, "Author's Comments", the four parts of historical annotations including the origin, system, anecdotes, and remains of each chapter have been updated. Your corrections are welcome! (Subsequent chapters will be shipped as soon as possible 😌)

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The more I read, the better it gets. The more I read, the more I like it. The author will update soon.

When did the "violence" in Da Qin begin?

I regret to tell you that the first volume of "Han Pulse" failed to be signed. Thank you to every reader who has read this far. We walked together through the threshold of Xianyang Palace and the rain in Daze Township, and listened to the swords of Hongmen Banquet and the songs of Chu in Gaixia. The moldy millet cake in Fu Shui's arms, Ji Xin's last shout in the fire, the big stone sitting alone in the Jingjing Road of Han Xin - these moments gained life because of your gaze. Signing a contract or not is not the end. The Fu family is still on the road, and the "Han" created by Liu Bang is still moving forward... I will calm down and ponder every word so that I can provide you with better quality reading! The story will not be stranded because of a contract. After the first volume is completed and re-reviewed, I will seek other ways to meet with readers, and concentrate on reviewing and completing the second volume... And even the entire Han Dynasty, taking everyone into that "self". Thank you again for reading and accompanying me. The remaining three chapters of this volume will be updated and left as a mark for when I am born. The country is not yet determined, and the pen and ink are not dry.