1399: Heavenly Salvation

Very well written, good luck to the author!

I've read the first three chapters. It's ok to write, but it's not suitable for online readers. New authors should write the first three chapters concisely and clearly. Author, you have written these three chapters. I think many people will quit before reading the first chapter. First of all, the reason for the protagonist's time travel is a car accident. It might be better if you write a story about saving people and causing a car accident. Secondly, after time traveling as an unidentified adult, he has no memory at all and no language. This is a foreign historical novel. If you write like this, do you expect readers to watch the process of an illiterate learning a language with you 😁, and then start to understand his own life experience? Writing like this at the beginning is too bland, without any ups and downs. You just write that the protagonist is a monastery, but due to war or other reasons, the monastery collapsed, and he can only come out to other monasteries through a letter of introduction. Writing this way, you have the identity of the protagonist, basic language, and life knowledge. In the second chapter, you can write some exciting plots, such as encountering robbers on the road, or meeting the heroine, etc. You have to give readers a reason to continue reading 😁. The above are purely suggestions😁

The protagonist's life is too frustrating, so it's not suitable for me.

The writing in the foreign history category is pretty good, and it can be used as food, but the pursuit of online writing is much more enjoyable, and then it is a bit fragmented. In the front, it is a personal system to open Goldfinger (single-player RPG), and in the back it becomes a strategy game + riding and slashing, which is a bit abrupt.

After reading the chapter on Constantinople yesterday, at the end I instantly had a scene in my mind that was like the movie Kingdom of Heaven 👏