The Royal Army Looks North

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I feel that there is not enough sense of fantasy It feels to me that this is a "historical conspiracy farming article" covered with fantasy. There is almost no supernatural power in the first chapter at the beginning. There are no monks, no monsters, and no resurgence of spiritual energy. Only the title "Demon Queen" hints at the possibility of a fantasy background, but the protagonist's daily life is completely a survival guide for ancient powerful officials. Readers cannot see the "fantasy" element in the first two or three pages, and will most likely abandon the book. Although the system flow is considered a fantasy branch, this system is now more like a "dimension reduction attack". , You also said that this is a fantasy genre. The key point is the word fantasy. Suggestions for implementation: No need to change the outline, just "add material" at the beginning. For example, in the next chapter, or interspersed with a paragraph from the protagonist's perspective, suggesting that this world is extraordinary: · Example 1: The protagonist looked at the snow outside the window, and suddenly saw a faint "purple air" hovering on Di Renjie's body. Combined with the rumors of the "Demon Queen", he realized that this world might really have magic, or a Confucian and Taoist luck system. · Example 2: The soldier trained by the protagonist, with the blessing of the system (humanity luck), has a faint condensation of evil energy above his head. Perhaps the reason why Qingping County is not in chaos is because the protagonist's "luck" envelopes him and suppresses the surrounding evil spirits. · Core: Let the "mysterious" element become a part of the protagonist's plan in advance, rather than a pure political game. I am also a novice in online writing. I wrote a novel that was originally urban and accidentally turned into fantasy 🤭 Here are the writing methods of famous people that I combined little by little. You can also refer to it 😁 [Abyss-style writing method:] ①[Lovecraft Essence of writing]: Core essence: unknown is greater than fear, mental pollution is greater than visual horror, human smallness, indescribability Abandon low-end horror "monster roars, bloody pictures", strictly follow Lovecraft's top writing: No Directly describe the monsters in the abyss, the mysterious true body, and the existence of the other world, and only describe the sequelae and distortion of perception: human vision is misaligned, memory is fragmented, logic collapses on its own, scientific and technological instruments are garbled and distorted, the spiritual power of cultivators is reversely corroded, sourceless whispers appear in the ears, and dreams overlap with the abyss illusion. All horror comes from "a higher unknown that humans cannot understand", not from the monster itself. Paired with Peruvian traits: The truth is the greatest curse. The more you know, the deeper you sink. Curiosity leads to destruction. Perfectly suitable for your abyssal apocalypse and mysterious science fiction settings. ②[Borges's essence of writing]: Core essence: Conceptual science fiction, infinite nothingness, the absurdity of logical closed loops, time, space and cognitive paradox ③[Shen Congwen's cool and blank writing method]: Core essence: restrained blank space, artistic conception is greater than the plot, a cold sense of fate, the world is ruthless but sentimental ④[Camus Essence of existential writing]: Core essence: absurd world, futile struggle, moving forward even though there is no solution, perseverance without salvation ⑤Zhang Ailing's cold writing style: Core essence: calm observation, desolate desolation, fester under prosperity, the real desolation of the world ⑥Celestial Candid Potato style writing: - Essence: refreshing rhythm, leapfrog counterattack, clear growth, emotional explosion, strong sense of catching up ⑦[Wang Zengqi's writing style]: Light and interesting, no delay, clean outlines, full of fireworks ⑧[Gu Long's writing style]: Short sentences, cold feeling, blank space, strong aura, fast pace, and the outcome is finalized with one shot, which is perfect for writing about fighting, coercion, confrontation, and hidden tension. - Essence: short and sharp sentences, mysterious and cold, emphasizing artistic conception rather than moves, and the lonely protagonist's temperament 1. Minimalist line drawing: do not pile up adjectives, only capture the "spirit" 2. Sentence characteristics: short, less long sentences, fast rhythm. 3. Character dialogue: extremely simple, there is something in the words, not straightforward

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