Re: Life in a Different World Starting from Immortal Lord

It really gave me a headache. To be honest, there is a setting of Immortal Lord. It is best to write it in a cool style. It is okay if it is not written, but the processing is very average. Shouldn't the Immortal Lord be the one who has gone through thousands of calamities and is in an untroubled state of mind? If you have to repeatedly weigh the pros and cons when meeting Emilia or Kursch, then you are still not out of touch with human thinking. Of course, this is just a small problem. After all, when you are weak, you should be cowardly. It is reasonable to be cautious and careful, and after all, there is no system power. But overall, after reading five chapters, the narrative efficiency is extremely low. The large amount of inner drama is simply crazy. It requires a lot of technical skills to keep people reading with many narrations (I don't feel it). The readers who clicked on this title, not surprisingly, want to see "The Immortal Lord reduces the dimensions to attack or changes the plot", rather than filling the plot with first-person psychological activities. Although there are changes in the plot, it is still boring to those who have read the original work. And if you are writing for people who have not read the original work, then you will not have a good explanation for many things. The proportion of "action" and "interaction" is too small. Psychological activities should be the "finishing touch" interspersed with actions and dialogues. Your "instruction manual" style of writing in the previous section really loses points. I have only read Chapter 10 so far. After Chapter 5, it will gradually become more acceptable. I look forward to the author's subsequent updates and improvements or modifications.

So far, it looks good. It is indeed the thinking of the Immortal. The sudden time travel insertion is not as stiff as other fans. I have really thought about it, but the name has always been called Ang Ting. Wouldn't it be better to call it Heitu or Fangyuan?