Yushou: I Loaded the Game Forum

This beginning is a bit scary. It always gives me a sense of déjà vu like that of the researcher's book. The author wouldn't have run away as soon as it was put on the shelf.

At the beginning of Clownfish, I immediately lost interest in reading it. Why are all the novels nowadays so weird?

I always feel like I'm going to run away when I read this kind of book. I read a very good book before, but it ran away before it was released, and my account was canceled 😅

It's almost the guaranteed level for the first three months of consumption, so I'll give it a try.

New author, please collect, comment and read, thank you all

Brother, I was invested in the bar and you signed the contract earlier than me. To be honest, I don't know what to write but I still persisted because I feel that if I don't write it long, I will never make progress. The early stage will be smooth, but in the later stage, I have no experience, and persistence is the most important thing. Come on, there are so many books that can achieve good results. We must learn through continuous completion.

To sum up, it's not really shit, because it's real shit and I'm too lazy to comment on it so I just took it away.

The old man pointed out quite a few problems, so I will just praise the author. I think the rhythm is okay, but the previous climax was not high enough (referring to the evolution of the fish), and then the fish did not participate in the battle, which means that the rhythm increased but did not fall smoothly in an orderly manner. Also, the innovation of beast control felt a bit blunt in the sensationalism. But speaking of it, you have done a good job of suppressing emotions from the beginning. For example, the protagonist dives to find fish, such as Chen Qiaoqiao is shady. It has been a long time since I have seen a newcomer who can write about emotional suppression and release. Every time I see you successfully write about emotional suppression and release, I thought you were a veteran who has written hundreds of thousands of words. Now it turns out that you are actually talented 😭 Don't go away ah ah ah

It's okay, but when it comes to the game, I don't feel anything. There is too little foreshadowing, and it feels inexplicable.

It seems that he is a pure newcomer 1 The function of the golden finger is not very prominent. I learned about a secret realm at the beginning, but I did not do any development based on the secret realm. The gold fishing was not that fun. What did I see when I went in to fish for gold for the second time? What worldview expansion can be done at the same time? Or use this to leave a small branch line? The second time I took a stone, it disappeared for a long time without mentioning it at all. The next time I write about this stone, readers are left wondering whether they will remember it. The function of this secret realm seems to be that the main character is missing, so I wrote one. 2 Since this is a story about players, what impact do players have on the world? It can't always be a background board. The player wants to hunt down the cultists, so the cultists attack, and the game ends in an anticlimactic manner, with a whole mini-climax that directly pulls the crotch. 3 The villains are written inexplicably, how come every rich class can only talk about the lowly poor people? It's too shameless, they are villains for the sake of villains. For example, what happened to the villain named Tang in the past two years? What is your inner demon like, and what is the purpose of coming out to participate in the competition this time? As long as you summarize it in two sentences, the characters will become more three-dimensional. Don't be a riddler. Riddles and foreshadowing cannot be incomprehensible. Every day is just this piece of land. 4 The rhythm is really average. It will be much better if you think about it carefully and sort out the writing. Give some necessary background introduction to the characters, and it will be much more comfortable to read. In general, there are shortcomings, but I still like you. First, we changed the problem of crotch stretching during orgasm, which affects the perception the most. Everything else is secondary, you can slowly think about how to connect the plots, but the climax of the crotch pulling is really intuitive and annoying.