The Legendary Mechanic, but with a Cultivation Panel

Another powerful fake elixir. Facts have proven that fake elixir is the most promising realm in the world of immortal cultivation. The probability of rebirth and time travel is second only to the female Immortal Emperor🐶

The subject matter is great, but you don't seem to know how to write it.

This fanfic is relatively average. If you haven't read the original work, or don't understand it, you can't read it at all, and it doesn't have the feeling of writing a fanfic. He seems to me like someone who is very eager to escape from the original story frame, but the writing is not good. I can't see it. What kind of coherence is there, and the pace is very fast, you can say that it does not suppress the combat power, but the problem is that after he stopped suppressing the combat power, there is nothing outstanding. Generally speaking, it is like a running account, without the feeling of the original work. It feels that the protagonist is just an ordinary person cheating, without any ingenuity.

So why are you looking for some budding leader? If you have this ability, you can't do any better than this.

The author said before that expertise is equivalent to Taoism! It's equivalent to saying that the protagonist has trained a Taoist body with the potential to become a god into a disposable puppet. It's such a waste that he doesn't want to see it anymore. There is no magic such as external incarnation!

Is there no Korean technician? It's half the fun

What a waste. The original book said that the protagonists of the planet all have A-level potential, and the leader's expertise is very helpful to Han Xiao even when he reaches super-A level! Is such a super A seed wasted? It would be better to change it to a growable puppet! Or just harvest this top-level expertise.

It feels so fluid when I look at it. Whether it is the transitional chapter of daily practice or the climax of the plot, it has a dull feeling when written. For example, these recent pictures are obviously about the main character showing up to show off, but after reading it, I just can't feel happy.

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By the way, has the author thought about how to deal with the protagonist's second hometown? At the end of the original book, Black Star takes the lead in invading his hometown. You can also refer to it when making it. At the end, he invades the fairy world. At that time, the protagonist is compatible with the characteristics of the two major systems of super god and true immortal, and moves towards a higher level.