The Pink God of War Is Not Easy to Mess With

Tsk. Let me talk about what I saw in the first chapter: Oh, forget it, let's just talk about it. You were writing conflict in the early stage, which is very visual, and you started to lay out a lot of settings in the later stage. The image of the heart being cut out from the chest should be the most graphic, but the image you wrote is not strong. Then the protagonist comes through and begins to lay out the protagonist's settings. Then the original owner appears and begins to lay out the original owner's settings and time-travel settings. It's like a whole chapter just laying out some settings, but no specific content at all. The main chapter talks about time travel. You can write something clear in a few strokes. In addition, the other two books will be removed from the shelves if they are not written. My first reaction when I saw it was that you were wasting my time. All books are just outlines and then cut. In addition, there are typos and the sentences are not fluent. Isn't it polished before sending? Above.