Look at the Power of My Nautilus!

Brother, the writing looks pretty good. He is considered a qualified novelist and makes people want to read. However, there are too many settings at the beginning and it is too cumbersome. This writing style feels a bit like what it was eight or nine years ago. I am not saying it is wrong, but it is definitely out of touch with the fast-paced era.

First of all, I have never reviewed books. Although the first two pages of this book explain how the protagonist travels through time and the system's tasks are good, there are too many dialogues on horseback. If I were you, I would cut the first two dialogues shorter, and then shorten the protagonist's non-bargaining with the system into one chapter. In the second chapter, the protagonist tests his own abilities and then goes to Masaki Keigo. If you write it this way, with the protagonist talking so much, going to PUA Masaki Keigo, and arguing with him, you will have to write at least two more chapters. And does the author think of Keigo Masaki too young? Keigo Masaki is the kind of mad scientist who cannot be PUAed by the protagonist in two or three sentences. Keigo Masaki's mentality is similar to that of Teng Gong. His heart is that he is a god and he should dominate the world. If this thing is written in the first ten chapters, this book will explode

To be honest, I'm very excited. It's already midnight and I don't even feel like sleeping. I have 100,000 manuscripts saved. I hope everyone can support me! By the way, because the first world is Tiga, I have to say something in advance: it is not a hodgepodge of world views.

Dear writer, your new book is very good. I have joined the new book investment group. Please update~