Rebirth of Light and Shadow: from Border Guard Soldier to China Entertainment Director

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It's very textured, the rhetoric is gorgeous, and the structure is problematic. Your first chapter is about the protagonist (forgot his name) from being in danger on an iceberg → before his death 25 years later → recalling his danger on an iceberg → really dying 25 years later → being reborn to being in danger on an iceberg and being remembered for a long time → recalling his death 25 years ago → returning his perspective to rebirth → inspiring him to live a good life. Don't you feel confused? The biggest problem with writing this way is that the perspective is confusing. But you can't always use ellipses to cut, and you can't control multiple angles of flash cutting. It feels very messy, so messy that I, who specifically read your novel, barely read the last 1/5 of the first chapter. Then let's talk about logic. You laid the foundation for him in the early stage, and you did not hesitate to write about it. Why are you suddenly in danger? Doesn't he have more than 700 days of experience? Why did he go there? When did Li Hao come? Why is there suddenly an extra Li Hao? I always thought he was the only one there. By the way, I remember Li Hao's name, but not the protagonist's name. The second logical question is why he was suddenly reborn, and at this point in time. You might say, I will write it later. But now there is a sense of fragmentation. This sense of fragmentation comes from your previous perspective switch. Suggestion: Write directly from rebirth. 25 Years are memories, and the glacier danger is also a memory. First write from rebirth to discomfort, and then slowly insert previous memories. Insert it wherever you use it. The biggest advantage of this change is that you can just insert whatever memory is needed. And the viewing angle is not messy. The above comments are purely personal opinions. I would be honored if I could help you. If this affects your creative status, it is not my intention. Come on. 😡

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