Warhammer 30K: Second Legion's Crusade

This male protagonist is more crazy than the nail-driving king. He is angry at one moment or another every day.

I hope this book will not involve plots such as female Space Marines, Eldar wives, three thousand beauties in the harem, seeking power and usurping the throne, etc. As long as it honestly writes about a normal Space Marine legion and the original body, I can continue reading it.

For now, it's normal for this legion to look torn apart. Without the protagonist, it won't be any better than the secret demon.

I, the author, want to write a military novel

I feel like I watched a warlord version of the King of Killers and his crippled son

Cultural workers must have a certain level of culture

The whole legion is like holding it together with glue, it will break when touched.

It feels like the protagonist gets angry at every turn and cannot control his emotions at all, just like Petula Boga's character with Angron the Nail. Coupled with the constant changing of perspective and tone, the plot is incoherent and the character of the protagonist is confusing. There is also the powerful setting of the original body and the reader's God's perspective, which makes it awkward to read it, especially when compared with those positive images of the original body. I feel that the character of the protagonist is like the negative aspects of Magnus Angron and Perturabo combined (naive stupidity and arrogance, getting angry at every turn, being unable to control his emotions, and having a nagging personality)

The writing was confusing. After finishing a chapter, I jumped to another perspective and the key points were not smooth. It was really uncomfortable to read chapter by chapter.

When you are beaten, you have to stand upright, and when you look bad, you have to say it. The writing of this book is very problematic, but I didn't notice it at first because of my pride, lack of experience, and work. I personally kept a small notebook. I originally planned to summarize the mistakes myself during the weekend break, although I also worked overtime on the weekend. The plot is inconsistent, there are few chapters with connected characters (when writing, the brain circuit always turns to the protagonist), there are many characters, the perspective jumps frequently, and the reading experience is extremely poor. Because of the poor proportions, the character personality I want to express is not expressed. But I'm sorry, I'm sorry for those of you who are still reading, I won't change it, because this book has already been written to almost 100,000 words, and I can't possibly spend a lot of time rewriting this book. Half of my body is already buried in the ground. To do so is to bury myself directly. At the same time, I still plan to continue writing this book with serious problems. After that, I plan to fix it as much as possible on the perspective of the protagonist Hector and Sarpedon. I will at least write the first 800,000-1,000,000 words. I will learn and write while writing, summarize the mistakes, accumulate experience, get started with Warhammer, and then write the next book. I really believe in what the editors say, cherish your opportunity to sign a contract. It is different to get a guaranteed contract. It can really motivate people. And, no matter how much you think about it, it's better to do it first. I have recently finished reading Horus Heresy: The False Gods and the Thousand Sons on QReader, and bought White Scar's book. 5.25

Update, the author is still actively correcting words, and responds to readers very quickly. I hope everyone's reading experience will be better~ Original comment on June 7, 2026. Doesn't the author correct errors before publishing the novel? There are too many simple word mistakes. It's not like it was written by AI, but like it was recorded by voice.

The writing is very good, and the stories of various characters are very vivid. But the portrayal of the protagonists in these stories is a bit strange. It just feels like the protagonist has been a little too deceived since entering the Great Crusade. This has a sense of fragmentation in the portrayal of the characters before and after. At least the protagonist seems a bit not strong-willed enough.

Isn't the Crimson Wolf Khorne?