I Rely on Merit to Cut Off Cause and Effect

Thousands of words turned into one word - Tsk! This was my first feeling after reading the first chapter. Let me talk about what I saw in the first chapter: The heroine went down the mountain for some reason, met a gangster, and killed the gangster with a golden finger, which also paved the way for some world views. Advantages: The opening chapter is very interesting! Disadvantages: 1. The feeling at the beginning ruined the second paragraph. The opening chapter is very emotional, with mountain roads, mist, bamboo forest and breeze. But it doesn't fit with the second paragraph. Looking at the first paragraph, you will feel that the heroine is observing the scenery or comprehending in the bamboo forest, and in the second paragraph, she suddenly goes down the mountain. There is a sense of dissonance. 2. Facialized villain Evil without reason, and I don't know why I know the heroine's situation. Anyway, I just want to tease, for the sake of teasing. 3. No background. The heroine seems to have been stepping on the clouds in the sky and deep in the thick fog, because you have not written about the world view. Even if you write about caravans and markets, it still makes it impossible to build up the appearance of this world. Because the world view is in your mind when you write, but not in the reader's mind. 4. Jue Jing What is written in your introduction is a jade slip? Isn't this all a piece of cake? The heroine's jade slip is equivalent to a version of cultivating immortality, burning merit number 95, and death note. Quite interesting setting. 5. Trapped in self-indulgence and unable to extricate myself Didn't look back, didn't look, didn't care, panicked, panicked, didn't dare to resist, whatever. What you gave is all invalid word order. Example: She looked at the letter nervously and fearfully. Contrast: She bit her lip, her fingers trembled slightly, and she pulled out the letter bit by bit, rubbing her fingers on the letter. After a moment, she made fists with both hands until her knuckles turned white. She took the letter in front of her, opened it suddenly, and narrowed her eyes into a thin line. Written casually, this is roughly what it means. The comparison below is called emotion, for example, what are you thinking? Your mind will be blank. But if I say, please imagine your tongue against your teeth. Even if you don't do it immediately, you will subconsciously move your consciousness to your tongue and teeth. This is the logic of using body movements to give emotions a place. 6. Tsk Why can't I help but tut after reading this. Suppose you write traditional Internet articles. Your content is essentially a cool article. Suppose you wrote a pleasant article, but you didn't give me any sense of enjoyment. 7. Three golden chapters There is conflict, There is suspense, There is hook. But it means nothing. Your conflict, someone bullied her, but it was resolved. Your suspense, who is she? Where is she? What is she going to do? Why do this? What is the Secret Sutra? Where did it come from? These are the general things you should have given in the first chapter, but you used them as suspense = you did not describe the basic settings clearly. Your hook, follow-up event. Sorry, I am not interested in opening the second chapter even though I am specifically reading your book. Why do you ask readers to open the second chapter? Above.

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