Mortal Body Immortality

Is the protagonist too anxious to improve his cultivation level?

It's okay, but it's not that interesting. The writing is mediocre, and the dialogue in the first two chapters is a bit unbearable. Let's write it first and hone it.

The writing is very good. This is the expression of a helpless monk struggling to survive, rather than like many novels, where he is invincible at the same level without knowing what he has done, and only cheats.

The progress is still slow at present, but the first four chapters always feel like there is a subtle and unspeakable sense of humor.

Save it on the bookshelf, come on, every author who tells stories seriously deserves encouragement

A lot of classic plots, but not bad for a new author.

The story is pretty good, but it's too straightforward in some parts. I feel like I'm reading a novel, and the girl always gives me the feeling that she's a bad person... Come on, come on

People on the roadside in the roadside world see that it is now smooth and has no ups and downs. It is as tasteless as drinking boiled water. It does not tell us how readers feel. Can you, the author, have the passion to finish this book as if you wrote a running account yourself?

It's not the kind of routine that involves practicing a bunch of spells to gain proficiency. There's no system or anything like that, and I haven't entered a sect to farm. It's finally a bit fresh. Come on.

Well written, keep it up!

There are a lot of bugs caused by plot conflicts, and the twelve levels of Qi training have a very poor look and feel, and it doesn't feel right.

The more you write about it, the more your combat power drops. A mortal bone can be upgraded faster than a rocket. Don't learn from cool writing.

Does the author have any old books? Not on the shelves, not enough to watch

I've read the first few chapters and it's okay.

There are still people who want to steal heaven, but ants do not want to be submissive. No matter there are billions of sentient beings! Why are the nine great immortal clans superior to all living beings? Why can the nine great immortal clans determine everything for all sentient beings? Why are all sentient beings not able to enjoy the prosperity created by all living beings? Why do the children born to all living beings always have to kneel before the nine great immortal clans! Are they seeking immortality? ! Maybe. But in fact, compared to the distant immortality, what they want is just the living self at the moment! Borrow the building as a courtesy and wish the author a great sale. Guest, would you like to come and watch "Nirvana Clan"? Group portraits, big background Family cultivation, power plotting, delicate writing, and emotions of each character Online, non-routine, original story, if you think it is still interesting, please comment and support

This book is very good, keep writing. Even if it doesn't sell well, I'll finish writing about him. Gold will shine sooner or later. There are traces of existence.

After reading the first three chapters, many dialogues and plot shaping are very good, especially the dialogue.