Junior Sister, I Really Have to Control You

At forty chapters, it is a very high-quality light novel, but judging from the current progress, the protagonist will go through a long period of vacuum or indefinite daily life after experiencing a series of pretentious and slap-in-the-face content. I hope to enrich the content and strive to write 1.5 Million words. The last two monthly passes are given away, and I hope it will become a hit soon

At least the current 50 chapters are very good. The writing is concise and plain. Although it is not that gorgeous, it is much better than those pretentious writings of the same type. Although the real-life part is a bit annoying for people who deliberately hide it, it is still acceptable. In other aspects, I have not seen any bad points so far. The overall evaluation is at least good. I will wait and see after it is released.

It's okay, it can be called top quality, but there are too few updates, the world view can be slightly expanded, and there are a few characters.

Update soon

It's me, I must control my junior sister and practice it as a shame/soul slave/slave bond before I can rest assured😌

Everything else is pretty good, but it's a bit embarrassing that the stinky chess basket still likes to play chess, it's too cliche...

The writing rhythm is very comfortable, and the food level is higher, you can read it I haven't read it since it was released.

It gets duller and duller as you go towards the end. The most interesting and interesting point in the early stage is the interaction of killing the little fish. There are other exciting points as well, but it can be said that there are almost none. Logically speaking, in fairy tales, the improvement of the protagonist's cultivation will bring about changes to the people and events around him, which is a great pleasure. However, the interpersonal relationship between the protagonist and other people here is too weak. The protagonist in the emotional line seems to have no desires and desires. There are many female protagonists but zero progress, and the career line has no main event to support it. Especially when I see the Dharma Realm, my cultivation has improved, and my status has reached a high level in the Dharma Lineage. However, the changes are too small, and it does not solve a certain person's dilemma, and the relationship with him/her has changed. I didn't achieve any of my goals, which gave me a sense of gain. That's right, unremarkable. At first I was looking forward to the further development of the game with my uncle, and looking forward to how the persecuted Xiaoyu would be the host in the future, but by the end I was a little bit lost in interest. Subsequently, no new highlights or expectations were added. So much so that it is a pity to abandon it and tasteless to eat.

This book's setting of binding the golden finger to the junior sister is very imaginative, and the writing also shows that the author is experienced and it reads smoothly. However, this type of golden finger that "enters a different space to practice, does not lose its own lifespan, and the external time is completely still" actually has a common logical problem - split time perception. The protagonist was talking to his junior sister one second, and in the blink of an eye, he went into seclusion in the cave for decades; to the junior sister, it was just a blink of an eye, but to the protagonist, it was a long time. It is actually quite logically inconsistent to be able to seamlessly connect the conversation, emotion and behavioral state of the previous second after exiting the game. And according to this rhythm, the protagonist's actual subjective experience of life is spent in seclusion for 80% of the time, and there will be a strong sense of misalignment with his physical age in his twenties and the social status of the outside world. Here are two small suggestions for the author's reference: 1. Add a perceptual compression setting: The moment the protagonist leaves the cave, the space will automatically compress and dilute the long time perception. The fruits and memories of hundreds of years of cultivation are completely preserved, but the subjective experience is just like having a dream that spans an extremely long time, or watching a feature-length movie. There is no sense of the vicissitudes of living through the years, and the ability to naturally connect to the rhythm of the outside world. ​ 2. Convert "bugs" into plot highlights: In the later stage, the cognitive conflict and mental alienation caused by this time dislocation can be written head-on, and it can become a unique plot line with great tension.

Every time I finish reading the latest chapter, there are a bunch of negative comments. As a person who thinks there is no problem, their mood will be affected by them. Author, you can either change it according to their wishes, or reply to them. What a mess in the comment area, and don't you think these people are deliberately setting the pace? They are nitpicking, scolding and reading at the same time. I believe that they are hired trolls.

When I saw the last few pictures on the shelf, especially when his uncle's best friend came to see her, I couldn't stand it anymore, two real-life monks who were almost a hundred years old, and a young woman who had just started to fall in love.,,,, This kind of novels nowadays all have the same routine, and the performance of an old woman who has been practicing for decades is... Just like a teenage girl, yes, you can say that she spends most of her time in cultivation and is ignorant of worldly affairs. She is a pure giant baby in a vase. She grew up in an environment with beautiful flowers and a full moon, and all living beings are equal. She is cared for very much, so don't describe her fighting scenes! A monk who has lived for such a long time and achieved great things may not understand what love is or what worldly things are, but he is absolutely firm-minded and decisive in killing. Moreover, the author also said that he went through hardships and went out to fight in his early years, and he still insists on writing this kind of character that has experienced life and death into blushing, crying, and being arrogant at all times, just like a silly Baitian.,, There is also a setting of divine consciousness in this book, which can quickly Quick memory, covering a vast area, and discovering small differences. A real person with this ability is just like a little girl. That is not called ignorance of the world, but a lack of brain stem. The monks in this kind of novel seem to be purely based on years of study and not on character. It is purely a matter of the author's level. In order to highlight the protagonist, he forcibly reduces the difficulty of the supporting character's guide, and reduces the IQ of the supporting actress to the level of a child, creating a low-level sense of satisfaction.

It feels tasteless and a pity to abandon. The protagonist feels like a tool to protect the junior sister. The character of junior sister, I feel that she is written very flatly. She eats and eats every day, and then complains about pain, pain, pain, pain, pain, pain, pain, pain, pain, pain, pain, pain, pain, pain, pain, etc., And takes the best resources but has no development. Showing the highlight of one's own character, the Dharma competition that was supposed to be the highlight turned out to be three accurate magic weapons. It seems that everyone is the one who is the one who inserts the bid. The male protagonist who doesn't know how to write is written as a bodyguard who loves to show off, and the female protagonist is written as a silly white sweet who only knows how to eat.

Hiding his cultivation level is a bit too deliberate. Every time he talks about the protagonist becoming a real person, he is always interrupted. The protagonist also seems to be mute and cannot speak.

The first 30 chapters are good to read, but the rest of it is just pretending to be stupid until it is released. As mentioned before, the temperament of the real person has changed a lot after washing the menstruation and severing the marrow. As a result, everyone is like a blind man regardless of their level of cultivation. After watching the protagonist take action, he sighed, "This person will definitely be able to break through the real person in a few years." It's as if the story that should have ended in three chapters was dragged to the seventy chapter in order to get it on the shelves.

Single or many? Don't do that kind of crazy and ambiguous thing and then have a single heroine

It's okay, but, smile bitterly, smile bitterly, smile bitterly, can you smile less bitterly?

It is repeatedly emphasized that the protagonist is terrible at chess without realizing it, and he still hasn't improved even if he becomes a real person. I was wondering, has the author ever played Go? The rules are clear and simple, it's nothing more than calculation ability. After improving your cultivation level and cultivating your spiritual consciousness, how can you be inferior to the level of a three-year-old child? The key is lack of self-knowledge? As a practitioner, you can't even know yourself. The protagonist has even studied chess records. How could he not know his own level? What you are writing is not a two-dimensional urban heroine. You have to create flaws such as falling on the ground, poor cooking skills, and not being able to take care of yourself to increase the sense of life. This method of labeling to increase recognition is so clumsy that I can only judge that the author is trying to improve the word count.

Does the male protagonist not realize that so many people like him? He knows it. Knowing that there are still so many people hanging around, he is a bit of a scumbag. You scumbag can't you just be a scumbag and be honest? You have to pretend to be innocent while swaying others to earn benefits. How is this different from those who raise fish with green tea? Even more disgusting, you have a system and you can sweep away with your looks. But can we not build a memorial arch and be a watchmaker at the same time?

The title of the book is a bit wrong. How about changing it to "My Junior Sister and I were at the Taoist Temple"?

As title

This book is quite interesting. Most of the articles about cultivating immortals that I read before focused on killings, family fights, and vying for girls, but there were very few descriptions of the cultivation of immortals themselves. The plot is also smooth, the pace is slow, but it is not boring. One more thing I have to admit, as I get older, I like some ambiguous descriptions in novels. Without female supporting characters, I always feel that something is missing. This book has a good grasp of this degree. I hope the author can continue to work hard. I will subscribe and support it once it is released.

It looked good before it was put on the shelves, but it became more and more boring after it was put on the shelves.

The front is considered to be fairy grass, and the back is barely considered to be food.

Did the author completely ignore the comment section and write his own thing? Byd is still arguing in the comment section about two female protagonists with two character cards. Wouldn't it be nice for the author to clarify the issue of one female protagonist earlier? If you have such a big appetite and want to eat everything, some readers will always feel uncomfortable at the end.

I have read Chapter 20 and have been practicing, but I am not happy at all. Where is the coolness of the label reflected in the text?

Absolutely amazing. Why does the protagonist like so much that the Heavenly Consciousness comes to his door to feed him, and then he pretends to be a little white lotus when he is done? Does he like adding three spoons of sugar so much? It's disgusting. After all the greed for money and profit, you still expect the protagonist to not be morally condemned at all.

None, single, long, or just stock trading

It's better not to enable this crappy plug-in than not to enable it. This is not the way to suppress the combat power. You have already enabled the plug-in, not to mention the big ones, but normal ones can't do it? You have to achieve this kind of achievement and then you have to practice slowly on your own to get it.

The tone has been set at the beginning. If you can't write so many emotional lines, just don't write it. The more you go to the back, the more confusing it will be. Have all the previous settings been lost, or does it mean that to go to a place, you have to open a woman and open a love line? Are you so sexually repressed?

The latest chapter is obviously a happy plot of stealing each other's homes, but it doesn't feel like the same happiness as before. Instead, I felt bored. Two forces that I am not familiar with have a direct relationship with me. Just want to skip quickly